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Gaia and Man (Other) by Blue Magpie
When Summer comes I like to walk the trails
that lead into the mountains and the vales
where Natureâs sweet aroma still prevails.
One evening âmidst the glory this entails,
just as the sun slipped through checkered rails
of distant trees whose awesome height curtails, 07
like troubled thoughts, the view that goes beyond
the local scenes of which we are so fond,
an owl approached and lighted on a frond.
Then silently before I could respond,
as if some God had waved a magic wand,
it was a man; bright eyed, his hair dark blond. 13
Most strangely dressed in shades of mottled brown
he owned a beard of obvious renown
and round his form was wrapped a patchy gown;
he had not come in any human town.
At first his features held a troubled frown,
but then he smiled and all my fears sank down. 19
I wished to speak but all my thoughts were numb,
and ere I could to stuttering succumb
he raised his voice above the midges hum
and spoke in measured tones, as if a drum
guided each word towards some final sum.
âThe time for you to speak has not yet come,
but when it does it shall not find you dumb. 26
For now compose your mind and listen well
for there is little time and much to tell.â
And as he spoke his words spun out a spell
that showed me that my body was a shell
within whose walls my consciousness could dwell
as if it were a luxury hotel. 32
But where it was not ever truly trapped,
and round about it constantly there lapped
a consciousness much greater and unmapped
that held within its core the word âAdaptâ
and which, could by my lesser mind be tapped
for understandings that would hold it rapt. 38
All this I knew within a single stroke
of a mosquitoes wing, and then the croak
of some well hidden frog abruptly broke
the spell, and once again the Owl-man spoke.
He bade me sit and button up my cloak
and listen as the night-time slowly woke. 44
A little while we sat and then he said.
âI see you suffer for the blood thatâs shed
by men whose tortured souls are darkly wed
to forces that all living men must dread,
and that your sanity hangs by a thread,
for you believe all hope for men is dead.â
I could not speak, and so nodded my head. 51
The silence settled round us for a moment,
across the vale a male deer barked and sent
a challenge to its peers as beetles went
awhirring past along some airborne scent.
The Owl-man watched the night, his head was bent
a little to one side, his gaze intent,
and I wondered on the ways that life is spent. 58
The Owl-man shook his locks and turned to me,
as if returning from some odyssey
to strange and distant lands I could not see,
and in a tone of quiet melody
began to speak of Manâs true destiny;
of things that could, but yet might never be. 64
Now as he spoke a nimbus limned his face
âBehold!â He said. âIn all the time and space
of this poor world none but the human race
has flown so high, or sunk to such disgrace;
obedience is tricky to replace
and freedom is a devil to embrace.
Mankind though lost is not without a place. 71
Know you this planet is a living soul
a single entity from pole to pole,
wherein the separate parts all play their role,
albeit they do not discern the whole,
the methods and the means of their control
or in the least their greater selfâs true goal.â 77
He stopped a second and, as silence fell,
held up his palm my questions to dispel.
âI see you have some doubts that I must quell.
Consider your own body wherein dwell
a multitude of tissues, how each cell
performs its sacred task and does it well,
dependant on its host of organelle. 84
Each unit is within itself discrete,
requiring water and some food to eat,
and passing out its wastes into the street.
However it must live within a suite
of other lives, each one of which must meet
some similar demands or face defeat,
to make the meaning of its life complete. 91
How much the same as this is any man
who lives upon this earth his given span
of years and does what simple work he can,
whilst striving to discern the master-plan.
The same is true of every rat that ran
along some drain, or hid within a can
from predatory eyes that sharply scan. 98
So too each plant, both moss and massive tree
that spreads its limbs out wide for all to see
and thus becomes a home to wasp and bee;
so too the fishes swimming in the sea
and all the birds that fly so easily.
While they at first appear to be free
their inner form constrains their destiny. 105
Each species is unique in this array,
and yet depends in such a complex way,
either as partner, host or simple prey,
upon the rest so much that should it stray
from contact it would very soon decay.
So too your bodyâs cells, to their dismay
would pine and die if you cast them away,
or you, should you depart this Earthâs bright bay. 113
Through this analogy we plainly see
how independent units come to be,
when viewed from the next level, partially
absorbed within a higher unity,
which in its turn is their reality,
although theyâre blind to its identity. 119
One lifetime on the higher scale will show
as generations on the one below,
not tens, but millions, as life seems to slow
down with each level outwards that we go,
in proportion to how large the units grow
and the level of complexity they know.â 125
For life, has always, since antiquity,
sought an increase, to its diversity;
diversity is lifeâs complexity
by which it can, through serendipity,
self-regulate an inner comity
without the need of conscious parity. 131
And here he stopped and gazed into the night.
The moon was slim and cast but little light,
although enough for us to see the white
and timid moths in their erratic flight.
The nimbus that had lit his face was quite
reduced, but still he was an awesome sight.
âListen.â He said. âFor now the time is right. 138
Just as a fetus growing in a womb
diversifies its structure when thereâs room,
though it as yet perceives no threat of doom,
so too a living planet will presume
to add new threads to its internal loom
before there is a need for them to bloom. 144
A fetus, is at this stage unaware
of its own self, it has no thoughts to share.
There is no sign as yet that it will care
for others or itself in acts or prayer,
and yet we know for certain that itâs there.
So now, I caution you, in truth beware
of using facile reasons to forswear
these thoughts, whatever others may declare. 152
This lack of mind does not mean lack of will,
it has a purpose and seeks to fulfill
its destiny with an intrepid skill.
It knows if it is healthy, and if ill
it will, in innate ways, respond, until
it is once more internally tranquil. 158
Which brings us back to thinking of mankind,
who having lost one sense, has now to find
another that will keep it from the blind
destructive pathways itâs been more inclined
to follow as its common sense declined.
The egotism with which theyâre aligned
is a poison to the higher conscious mind. 165
This sense, with which all living things are blessed,
of which mankind, by thought has been divest,
is the innate perception of whatâs best
and by which all lifeâs actions are assessed.
But men, and women too it must be stressed,
are, by the nature of their minds, possessed
of tools by which the higher mindâs accessed. 172
And man, in being free, must learn to choose
with care the mental pathways he pursues.
Through harmony alone can he infuse
within his mind the attitudes and views
which will resist those forces which abuse
that very freedom it is his to use. 178
And in their coldly ignorant abuse
inevitably weaken and reduce
the thoughts by which men in their minds deduce
those understandings which, though more abstruse,
alone in their totality produce
the only mind-set which can introduce
within mankind the will to call to truce
this war with Nature that is so obtuse. 186
Man is a part of this community
which can, despite its nebulosity
be touched and known in its ipseity;
by viewing it with animosity
and striving to subdue it physically
he damages his own integrity
and risks losing his functionality. 193
If Mankindâs soul is ever to find peace
this war against itself must surely cease,
and man accept his place as just one piece
of a far greater whole, this would increase
his understanding, which would then decrease
his fear and free him to enjoy his lease
of life, before it runs to its surcease.â 200
Now as he spoke his voice became intense.
âThe role that men might play is quite immense.
But first they need to learn that life makes sense,
and put aside the ignorant pretense
that leads them to deny their co-existence,
only then will they be able to commence
to be Earthâs avatars and its defence. 207
But you should know the future is not writ
in some celestial book that wonât permit
the path laid down to change, man must commit
himself to life if he would live.
Transmit
the meaning of my words as you see fit,
the hearer must seek out the truth of it.â 213
Once more he stopped, and strangely it occurred
to me that he had said more than Iâd heard,
although I thought Iâd followed every word.
The moon I saw had crossed the sky one third,
so quickly that it really seemed absurd,
and even as I watched his outline blurred
and before me once again I saw the bird, 220
its blinking eyes full of a gentle light
that stilled my thoughts and put my fears to flight,
although my heart still beat as if in fright.
âSuch is the truth,â it said, âof Mankindâs plight,
and only men themselves can put it right.â
Then raised its wings and flew into the night. 225
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Posted: February 22, 2006 4:16 AM PST; Last modified: February 23, 2006 12:16 AM PST
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The owl man is good, and the dialogue is done fairly well. I do think that you constrain yourself too much with the rhyming scheme - I reckon you could reduce the stanzas to four lines apiece, keeping the choice rhymes, and still achieve the same effect.
In all honesty, I am going to have to come back to this later; there's far too much content to comment on in one sitting.
Thanks for taking the time to read the poem, yes it is longer than many, but have you read Esther Ransom's "The Conciousness of Earth" it gives you a new dimension to the concept of a long poem. It is however in blank verse and not rhymed iambic (mostly) pentametre, so you are correct, the rhyme scheme did constrain what I could say. For example the point about a system's increasing inner complexity giving rise automatically, after a certain level of complexity, to hierarchical, self-regulatory structures is poorly made because of the need for polysyballic words, or just too many words.
However, as is so often the case in poetry, once I sat down and decided to try actually making the case for the planet as a single living entity in some real rather than theoretical consideration, with all that that brings into focus, such as humanity, well western european humanity and its diaspora, being mostly cancerous cells and the inevitability of the system attempting, in an unconcious way, to maintain its own inner health, the structure of the poem evolved on its own. I had expected to produce a more varied rhyme scheme, this was very hard to work with.