Re: Comparisons by anagram	28-Aug-02/6:25 PM
But it's never good in the first place. Think of it. The first time you made love. Now compare that to what you're capable of now. I go through hell with my poems. Don't think I just toss those out. Some come easy like Monica, but I still have to sit with them and work them through. It's worth it.
Re: Comparisons by anagram	28-Aug-02/5:07 PM
On second look these semm like beginnings of sentences. If your still fond of this one maybe you could finish some of these sentences and what you make of it.
Re: Too far by heroditus	28-Aug-02/4:57 PM
I'm enjoying this intil --and choice cannot choose. --He knows that in choosing pain always wins. Is excellent. At this point a 4. Because you can do better.
Re: The Hand of God by Christof	28-Aug-02/9:12 AM
Are you published? Have you self published? I'm interested in having some of your poems in a proper book I can read.
Re: Awesome Heir by Shin-Bojangles	28-Aug-02/12:09 AM
Good night Aragon, goodnight Zee, goodnight Shin, oh and by the way congradulations on this triumph of a comments section! Your 14 syllables have inspired an epic. I'd give you a 10 but it would be a shame to add votes to this masterpiece.
Re: Fetch by Limness	27-Aug-02/11:49 PM
He's a flea ridden mongrel, his fart's make me weep, he's licking his balls all night long, I can't sleep!
Re: Lachrymalia by Lain	27-Aug-02/11:30 PM
I'm not a fan of rhymn. i am a fan of -this renaissance of dust. don't you think the title too clinical for this piece?
Re: Tryst by <~>	27-Aug-02/11:27 PM
whatever she needs.
Re: Fetch by Limness	27-Aug-02/11:25 PM
a good laugh. 6. Could be expanded, He shits on the carpet, my shoes are all ripped, He knocked down my Gra'ma, and shattered her hip.
Re: Tryst by <~>	27-Aug-02/11:14 PM
Just don't forget about her. Call her in 2 weeks, see how she's doing. Buy her a new pair of shoes.
Re: Senses of Time by searching	27-Aug-02/11:07 PM
I was going to give this a 2 but then the last line moved everything up 4 notches.
Re: denied by <~>	27-Aug-02/10:59 PM
No, song lyrics can be poetry. I'm just a sucker for metaphor. It's like offering someone choc. chip when they always want raspberry swirl.
Re: denied by <~>	27-Aug-02/10:52 PM
ZeeZee, I think i'm gonna have to give this a 3. If i voted on it as verse it would rank an 8 possibly but as poetry it leaves me wanting.
Re: Tryst by <~>	27-Aug-02/10:45 PM
This made me laugh when i read it the first time. I can't figure out why. I think it's fine as is. The past tense verbs work well together. And the self awareness at the end, is like guilt after doing the deed. Moments pleasure vs. lifetime of regret.
Re: father Worked Nights by poetandknowit	27-Aug-02/10:11 PM
Anotherday242: on your profile it says you signed up to receive comments by e-mail, but you posted no poetry. So you can't. Post something.
Re: Comparisons by anagram	27-Aug-02/8:08 PM
Wait one second this Angel's working, in the poem it says sh'es sleeping I' confuseded. Please explain.
Re: father Worked Nights by poetandknowit	27-Aug-02/8:01 PM
Hey Swishy, post some poetry.
Re: Suicide III by disturbedone182	27-Aug-02/7:35 PM
You know p&k the more time I spend going through random poetry the more I want to agree with you. Well atually you couldn't be more correct, but their just looking for someplace to post their stuff. Maybe we should have a referral site for teenage angst.
Re: Comparisons by anagram	27-Aug-02/6:53 PM
Can I get back to you in a minute, I'm trying to understand what's going on with dark angel. I don't want to ignore you
Re: Comparisons by anagram	27-Aug-02/6:42 PM
I think I suffer from wouldn't the world be a better place if everyone wrote like me syndrome. This poem for example, I know what your talking about but I crave the details. I want metaphors, like, niave as turnips,in my poem. Your angel sleeps like......what? I know you could come up with something lovely. The emotions are there but I want more substance.