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Suicide III

Member since 2002 · Posted 27 Aug 2002 · Edited 28 Sep 2002 · 6 comments

Temptation rises within me My wrists tingle as they bleed I feel no love, I feel no hate If I felt regret, it'd be too late What's the point of going on? Why is ending my pain so wrong? Will they notice? Will they care? Why does my life seem so unfair? How will things be different when I die? How many people will ask, "why?"? Will I really go to hell? Why did no one catch me when I fell? I don't give a shit anymore For my life is just a bore I'll just say my last good-byes Before I go commit suicide Why should I keep from ending of my life Why should I not die tonight? Aim the gun, keep my hands steady I owe the world no fucking apology ...

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[4] anagram 27-Aug-02/7:16 PM Reply

OK enough is enough.I couldn't take 'Suicide II' or any future Suicides. You should listen to 'Don't Try Suicide' by Queen,track 2 side 2 'The Game' album and see if the great man can steer you in the right direction.

[0] poetandknowit 27-Aug-02/7:18 PM Reply

Of good god, see all the other adolescent angsters on this site and do a group hug. All your stuff is so over-the-top melodramatic, filled with such serious problems as pimples and being grounded on Friday night so you cannot go to the mall. Just wait, it gets worse. But seriously, contact all the teeny bops on the site and give a big hug to cure your sad miserable writing.

[0] god'swife 27-Aug-02/7:35 PM Reply

You know p&k the more time I spend going through random poetry the more I want to agree with you. Well atually you couldn't be more correct, but their just looking for someplace to post their stuff. Maybe we should have a referral site for teenage angst.

[4] Frass 27-Aug-02/8:34 PM Reply

I'm with Anagram; hang in there, D.O. Tomorrow you may meet someone who'll help you to see clear to a different perspective on your life a then we'll all be rating your odes to a butterfly, or some such.

[n/a] Christof 28-Aug-02/7:35 AM Reply

Please write about something else. Or if you're going to do teenage angst, do it with humour. Think of Morrissey - he's a funny chap, his irony undercuts all that 'to die by your side' stuff, and that is truly touching. Whereas this is bogus (judging by the fact that you're alive enough to post this). If you need help, get help; if this is meant as poetry, well, it ain't.

[2] INTRANSIT 29-Sep-02/8:37 AM Reply

I've seen a suicide. Guy shot himself with a .22 handgun. It's nothing more than sad and selfish. We owe you no apology either. BUT there's a rythm.2