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Suicide III (Free verse) by disturbedone182

Temptation rises within me My wrists tingle as they bleed I feel no love, I feel no hate If I felt regret, it'd be too late What's the point of going on? Why is ending my pain so wrong? Will they notice? Will they care? Why does my life seem so unfair? How will things be different when I die? How many people will ask, "why?"? Will I really go to hell? Why did no one catch me when I fell? I don't give a shit anymore For my life is just a bore I'll just say my last good-byes Before I go commit suicide Why should I keep from ending of my life Why should I not die tonight? Aim the gun, keep my hands steady I owe the world no fucking apology ...

poetandknowit 27-Aug-02/7:18 PM
Of good god, see all the other adolescent angsters on this site and do a group hug. All your stuff is so over-the-top melodramatic, filled with such serious problems as pimples and being grounded on Friday night so you cannot go to the mall. Just wait, it gets worse. But seriously, contact all the teeny bops on the site and give a big hug to cure your sad miserable writing.




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