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Daughter (Free verse) by pkdrunner Observe the bride stepping so radiant
Her maids averting their eyes
Protecting her from nervous laughter
Serious young groom quietly saying words
That willingly seal his fate to hers
Forever after
Father of the bride sheds tears of parting and hope;
I didn't used to be so soft!
When life was not laid out so sweet and bare
Up the ladder:
The Silent Musing
Down the ladder:
remembering you
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 5.6
Posted: July 11, 2002 8:16 PM PDT; Last modified: July 12, 2002 7:14 PM PDTWeighted score: 5.3 Overall Rank: 3682 Comments:
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evergreen @ 165.247.107.129
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11-Jul-02/8:28 PM
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love the last line
cute and sweet... I enjoyed it...
nicely evocative
I don't get it. Are the words willing, or is he? In any case, any poeme about a wedding should feature the word 'JESU' written in asterisks 70 feet high. This poeme does not. Therefore I can give you no higher than a 2. However, since I have given up voting, I won't.
Aaah! Good poem. Last 2 lines could be a poem onto themselves.6
I liked it as well and will give it 6 plus the 2 that Dark Angel held back 8/20
I liked it as well and will give it 6 plus the 2 that Dark Angel held back 8/20
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