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Daughter (Free verse) by pkdrunner

Observe the bride stepping so radiant Her maids averting their eyes Protecting her from nervous laughter Serious young groom quietly saying words That willingly seal his fate to hers Forever after Father of the bride sheds tears of parting and hope; I didn't used to be so soft! When life was not laid out so sweet and bare

-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 15-Aug-02/7:51 PM
I don't get it. Are the words willing, or is he? In any case, any poeme about a wedding should feature the word 'JESU' written in asterisks 70 feet high. This poeme does not. Therefore I can give you no higher than a 2. However, since I have given up voting, I won't.




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