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Lyric № 160

Lachrymalia

by Lain

Member since 2001 · Posted 16 Mar 2002 · 10 comments

There are ruins deep inside me Of what I can't become, That fire in your eyes Like the fire of the sun. Darker than my passion, Darker than my lust, I feel you burn inside me Like a fever from your touch. You're the phoenix of my ashes, This renaissance of dust. I cannot breathe without this, But it hurts you just as much.

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10 comments

[2] anonymous 21-Jun-01/11:40 PM Reply
I love the flow in this; beautiful :)
[8] nentwined 16-Mar-02/1:21 AM Reply
Does the title have meaning? I suppose I could do a google search. Hmm. Maybe for lyric poetry I should add a comments from the author field... so you can explain what sort of tune it would be going to... hrm.
[8] nentwined 19-Mar-02/2:06 PM Reply
just had to reiterate that I love the flow of this poem -- very lyric, I can see it working for slow and sweet to hard and heavy, or just about anything inbetween (other than 80's silliness, I think).
[2] anonymous 5-Apr-02/6:23 AM Reply
10 points just for the title!
(I was beginning to think us big-worders were a dying species)
[n/a] beakism 9-Jun-02/11:57 AM Reply
^ Yeah, good point!!! Using big words shows that we're more intelligent than other people!!!!!
[0] Bobjim the II › beakism 24-Mar-03/2:08 PM Reply
No, it shows your an arrogant twat with poor communication skills.
[6] deleted user 10-Jun-02/12:40 AM Reply
What does Lacrymalia mean? Something to do with tear ducts? An explanation would help clarify. Very nice imagery, but a bit vague.
[6] god'swife 27-Aug-02/11:30 PM Reply
I'm not a fan of rhymn. i am a fan of -this renaissance of dust. don't you think the title too clinical for this piece?
[10] thepinkbunnyofdoom 27-Jan-03/12:16 PM Reply
You have a good flow and i like the way you used the phoenix
[7] Jeremi B. Handrinos 27-Jan-03/1:44 PM Reply
This poem is all over the place. A "renaissance of dust", if you will? 7.