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denied

Member since 2002 · Posted 27 Aug 2002 · 6 comments

come place your ear to my heart lay your weary head to my breast here is a place in my soft embrace for a tired, hard man to find rest just for a moment forget it all let go of the world and hold me be my lover, dear friend (oh, don't let it end) but we both know this never will be I saw in your look right from the start but prayed you would let me in the hope in your eyes you chose to deny we'd end before we'd begin we kissed and we tripped, did you fall, love? to your locked door I offered my key but you felt secure and chose to endure you said we were not meant to be there is a danger in holding me my touch is so gentle, so true all else fades away so easy to stay-- but another has spoken for you so out of this fire I'll draw my hand and my heart and my hopes and my dreams it could have been, love it should have been, love but you remained bound in your means come, lay your head against my heart listen to its rhythm as I sigh take with you this kiss (it's what I'll most miss) I never was good at good-bye

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[7] searching 27-Aug-02/2:13 PM Reply
A good reflection of the manifestation of boundaries within or morality perhaps?
[8] Frass 27-Aug-02/8:39 PM Reply
Refreshingly heartfelt for this site. Narudasian? Does remind me of Pablo. Another poem that could work as a song; Shawn Colvin could do it well.
[3] god'swife 27-Aug-02/10:52 PM Reply
ZeeZee, I think i'm gonna have to give this a 3. If i voted on it as verse it would rank an 8 possibly but as poetry it leaves me wanting.
[n/a] <~> 27-Aug-02/10:56 PM Reply
okay, so song lyrics are bad poetry. but, how to make it better, mrs g? give it 6 more months, and reduce it by half?
[n/a] <~> 27-Aug-02/10:57 PM Reply
is it just that's it's all spelled/spilled out?
[3] god'swife 27-Aug-02/10:59 PM Reply
No, song lyrics can be poetry. I'm just a sucker for metaphor. It's like offering someone choc. chip when they always want raspberry swirl.