Re: Johnny Nasty by peotaster	8-Sep-02/9:43 AM
Why is it 98% of the submissions to this site contain no poetry. This is an observation written down in a purely unpoetic manner. WHERES THE FUCKING POETRY!!! There is more poetry in this homeless guys unwashed underwear then there is in your poorly chosen words.
Re: Mean Matt was so mean, when a homeless guy asked him for change he gave him a -blank- by beakism	8-Sep-02/9:29 AM
This is obviously a hate-filled flashlight. There is no light emitted from it, because hate has old used up batteries. Only love has the fresh new batteries needed to eluminate the world. Mean people, like Matt, get aggrevated because there flashlights don't work. They turn these hopeless flashlights, these "flashlights of hate" on their fellow man and beat them with it til they die. beakism, you are truly a philospher-poet.
Re: Instance of Twinning by Wulf	8-Sep-02/9:13 AM
I have read some of you other poems, but they hoonestly did not impress. This, on the other hand, is quite intreging. I like being made unconfortable by artists. this does the trick. The actual writing is awkward in several places. The 1st line of the 2nd stanza for example. I am particularly fond of the final stanza.
Re: [Untitled] by Sirena_Feroz	7-Sep-02/7:58 PM
A read this very slowly and carefully. I still don't understand it, I enjoyed it quite a bit. The sudden appearance and disappearance of the Dr. bothers me, but that's because I'm old, and I like structure.
Re: Perfect Love by snowing	6-Sep-02/10:10 PM
What makes this a poem? Please explain.
Re: Celebration by unknown	6-Sep-02/9:18 PM
Forget the last stanza it's totally useless. Everything contained within it is implied in the rest of the poem. How about "I kissed from your breasts" "the down of your thighs"
Re: Pleasurable Agony by crims0ngh0st	6-Sep-02/9:04 PM
The antithesis of erotica. Who needs Keigels, after reading this my vagina squeezed shut.
Re: Self by ThoughtfulSoul	6-Sep-02/8:53 PM
Things are not quenched for, they are quenched by. Here's a small nugget of wisdom you can take with you on your quest for enlightenment: Many people will incourage you by telling you your poetry is good. They are lying.
Re: Reality by ThoughtfulSoul	6-Sep-02/8:39 PM
Yes, you're right, god is a figment of your torn imagination. So is everything else. Take some serotonin re-uptake inhibitors. You'll feel loads better. Though they might interfere with your so- called talent.
Re: knots... by anatheman	6-Sep-02/8:31 PM
You must have spent hours working this out. It shows.
Re: More 7-Eleven holdups. by Bachus	6-Sep-02/7:56 PM
Perfect. You have left thirsting for more. Someones probably going to whine at you that the 4th has 8 syllables instead of 7, so you might want to change <isn't> to <ain't>. I don't give a fuck, these are perfect for a monologue. The Haiku bandit.
Re: Ode to writers' block by Roisin	6-Sep-02/7:49 PM
poignant.
Re: Thoughtless Deed by craiggiarc1971	6-Sep-02/7:48 PM
Really awful, and pregnant with bad grammaticals.
Re: Waiting by itchiwitch	6-Sep-02/7:42 PM
Remove the last 2 lines. They turn this sappy poem into a late night talk show intro.
Re: He loves me by susie	5-Sep-02/11:42 PM
thisd poem is absolutely beautiful.
Re: Contra Mundum by psychedelic	5-Sep-02/11:04 PM
gate/fate true/blue and of course the ever popular love/above.
Re: finally found you by webguy	5-Sep-02/11:01 PM
Cherry handles?
Re: Celebration by unknown	5-Sep-02/10:51 PM
I don't think Fabio would place his face anywhere near her deep smelling open sex. He might kiss heaving breasts but nothing with the copper taste of blood. Did you have to mention Fabio? Now the whole image is ruined for me.
Re: Celebration by unknown	5-Sep-02/10:46 PM
Yeah it needs some editing, but "copper taste of blood" and "naked scalp breathed cinnamon are first rate. Thanks for your concern Mr. Longfellows, but I am single because I'm not married not because I'm alone.
Re: Celebration by unknown	5-Sep-02/10:22 PM
Wow. There certainly has been alot of erotica coming up on random recently. This is uncomfortably arousing. Well developed ambience. Sight, sound, taste, smell, touch. The last stanza doesn't live up to the others.