Re: Pleasurable Agony by crims0ngh0st	6-Sep-02/9:04 PM
The antithesis of erotica. Who needs Keigels, after reading this my vagina squeezed shut.
Re: Self by ThoughtfulSoul	6-Sep-02/8:53 PM
Things are not quenched for, they are quenched by. Here's a small nugget of wisdom you can take with you on your quest for enlightenment: Many people will incourage you by telling you your poetry is good. They are lying.
Re: Reality by ThoughtfulSoul	6-Sep-02/8:39 PM
Yes, you're right, god is a figment of your torn imagination. So is everything else. Take some serotonin re-uptake inhibitors. You'll feel loads better. Though they might interfere with your so- called talent.
Re: knots... by anatheman	6-Sep-02/8:31 PM
You must have spent hours working this out. It shows.
Re: More 7-Eleven holdups. by Bachus	6-Sep-02/7:56 PM
Perfect. You have left thirsting for more. Someones probably going to whine at you that the 4th has 8 syllables instead of 7, so you might want to change <isn't> to <ain't>. I don't give a fuck, these are perfect for a monologue. The Haiku bandit.
Re: Ode to writers' block by Roisin	6-Sep-02/7:49 PM
poignant.
Re: Thoughtless Deed by craiggiarc1971	6-Sep-02/7:48 PM
Really awful, and pregnant with bad grammaticals.
Re: Waiting by itchiwitch	6-Sep-02/7:42 PM
Remove the last 2 lines. They turn this sappy poem into a late night talk show intro.
Re: He loves me by susie	5-Sep-02/11:42 PM
thisd poem is absolutely beautiful.
Re: Contra Mundum by psychedelic	5-Sep-02/11:04 PM
gate/fate true/blue and of course the ever popular love/above.
Re: finally found you by webguy	5-Sep-02/11:01 PM
Cherry handles?
Re: Celebration by unknown	5-Sep-02/10:51 PM
I don't think Fabio would place his face anywhere near her deep smelling open sex. He might kiss heaving breasts but nothing with the copper taste of blood. Did you have to mention Fabio? Now the whole image is ruined for me.
Re: Celebration by unknown	5-Sep-02/10:46 PM
Yeah it needs some editing, but "copper taste of blood" and "naked scalp breathed cinnamon are first rate. Thanks for your concern Mr. Longfellows, but I am single because I'm not married not because I'm alone.
Re: Celebration by unknown	5-Sep-02/10:22 PM
Wow. There certainly has been alot of erotica coming up on random recently. This is uncomfortably arousing. Well developed ambience. Sight, sound, taste, smell, touch. The last stanza doesn't live up to the others.
Re: i would have you by silvertongueddevil	5-Sep-02/9:43 AM
This is gorgeous. This devil has his charms.
Re: remembering you by sapphire_rain7	5-Sep-02/9:24 AM
"and the willows weep/this cold rain/doesn't wash away" Always good when a middle line pertains to both what preceeds and what proceeds. Sexy poem.
Re: Thank You by pnaipoet	5-Sep-02/9:17 AM
More -=Dark_Angel=-.
Re: Birthday Love by Tormentedsoul718	4-Sep-02/11:42 PM
Tormentedsoul718, I'd ream you a hole but there's no need for debate. It's plain to see you're an inadequate fake. Go forever pretending that this isn't you, but please straighten your costume, your mask's all askew.
Re: Lines by OneFingerAnswer	4-Sep-02/11:26 PM
Took me a couple of readings to understand. If you make the line break at more, the pause would help comunicate the thought.
Re: Ambiguous Love Poem For A Girl I Once Knew by poetandknowit	4-Sep-02/6:29 PM
What a sad and beautiful sap. Drunken Romantics, I used to collect them. Your poem makes me lonely for my derelict sock monkey. I admire the way you make him fall apart, right before our very eyes. Be careful Mr., your tender heart is showing.