Re: i would have you by silvertongueddevil	5-Sep-02/9:43 AM
This is gorgeous. This devil has his charms.
Re: remembering you by sapphire_rain7	5-Sep-02/9:24 AM
"and the willows weep/this cold rain/doesn't wash away" Always good when a middle line pertains to both what preceeds and what proceeds. Sexy poem.
Re: Thank You by pnaipoet	5-Sep-02/9:17 AM
More -=Dark_Angel=-.
Re: Birthday Love by Tormentedsoul718	4-Sep-02/11:42 PM
Tormentedsoul718, I'd ream you a hole but there's no need for debate. It's plain to see you're an inadequate fake. Go forever pretending that this isn't you, but please straighten your costume, your mask's all askew.
Re: Lines by OneFingerAnswer	4-Sep-02/11:26 PM
Took me a couple of readings to understand. If you make the line break at more, the pause would help comunicate the thought.
Re: Ambiguous Love Poem For A Girl I Once Knew by poetandknowit	4-Sep-02/6:29 PM
What a sad and beautiful sap. Drunken Romantics, I used to collect them. Your poem makes me lonely for my derelict sock monkey. I admire the way you make him fall apart, right before our very eyes. Be careful Mr., your tender heart is showing.
Re: Saturation Point by malakin	4-Sep-02/9:22 AM
Is this a poem about a mime? It could be. Not really a poem though is it? Sounds like a good talking to.
Re: Craving by mytenderrage	4-Sep-02/9:17 AM
Obviously the motivation is there. Try to creat a story, paint us a picture of the two of you.
Re: Oh Well by RWAndersen	4-Sep-02/9:13 AM
the 'oh well's' destroy this poem.
Re: She Thinks Of Men Waiting by Christof	3-Sep-02/11:09 AM
Well I'm off. I've got talk to a group of gang-bangers about abstinence, safe sex, and getting an education. No joke. I'll be thinking about all your loving naked bodies the whole time. Well in your case p&k I guess it's your ugly naked body. Have fun kids.
Re: An Undulation in Time by Monchichee	3-Sep-02/11:01 AM
Sometimes works. Mostly doesn't. Too many words. I can't explain
Re: She Thinks Of Men Waiting by Christof	3-Sep-02/10:56 AM
Hell bring her along we'll make it a foursome.
Re: She Thinks Of Men Waiting by Christof	3-Sep-02/10:50 AM
What do you say p&k? Beautiful sobbing high-geared f**king and then we'll ly like silent deer tracks in the freshly fallen snow.
Re: She Thinks Of Men Waiting by Christof	3-Sep-02/10:38 AM
oh come on, you're an educated man. You know everybody wants to go to bed with everybody else. They're lined up for blocks. I'll go to bed with you they won't miss us.
Re: Black Heart by brazen	3-Sep-02/10:17 AM
Painters paint over there mistakes, they don't see were it goes.
Re: She Thinks Of Men Waiting by Christof	3-Sep-02/10:13 AM
But you were also commenting on my conversation with Christof. Why?
Re: She Thinks Of Men Waiting by Christof	3-Sep-02/10:01 AM
Why do you care enough to comment?
Re: Thinkin! by KezzY20	3-Sep-02/9:36 AM
Oh my goodness. Mother goose is more poetry then this. 90% of this poem is either a preposition or a pronoun. Try adjectives, adverbs, nouns.
Re: Shelter by poetandknowit	3-Sep-02/9:32 AM
My skin blended from the hunter? this means camoflauge i'm sure, but 'from' makes it awkward. Otherwise perfect, as always.
Re: She Thinks Of Men Waiting by Christof	3-Sep-02/9:17 AM
I really do love your poetry. I carry your images around with me. The stablehand and now these men. The transposing of the stereotypes is wonderful, and myth is eveything. Will they say that, or is she insecure? Concise.