Re: Saturation Point by malakin	4-Sep-02/9:22 AM
Is this a poem about a mime? It could be. Not really a poem though is it? Sounds like a good talking to.
Re: Craving by mytenderrage	4-Sep-02/9:17 AM
Obviously the motivation is there. Try to creat a story, paint us a picture of the two of you.
Re: Oh Well by RWAndersen	4-Sep-02/9:13 AM
the 'oh well's' destroy this poem.
Re: She Thinks Of Men Waiting by Christof	3-Sep-02/11:09 AM
Well I'm off. I've got talk to a group of gang-bangers about abstinence, safe sex, and getting an education. No joke. I'll be thinking about all your loving naked bodies the whole time. Well in your case p&k I guess it's your ugly naked body. Have fun kids.
Re: An Undulation in Time by Monchichee	3-Sep-02/11:01 AM
Sometimes works. Mostly doesn't. Too many words. I can't explain
Re: She Thinks Of Men Waiting by Christof	3-Sep-02/10:56 AM
Hell bring her along we'll make it a foursome.
Re: She Thinks Of Men Waiting by Christof	3-Sep-02/10:50 AM
What do you say p&k? Beautiful sobbing high-geared f**king and then we'll ly like silent deer tracks in the freshly fallen snow.
Re: She Thinks Of Men Waiting by Christof	3-Sep-02/10:38 AM
oh come on, you're an educated man. You know everybody wants to go to bed with everybody else. They're lined up for blocks. I'll go to bed with you they won't miss us.
Re: Black Heart by brazen	3-Sep-02/10:17 AM
Painters paint over there mistakes, they don't see were it goes.
Re: She Thinks Of Men Waiting by Christof	3-Sep-02/10:13 AM
But you were also commenting on my conversation with Christof. Why?
Re: She Thinks Of Men Waiting by Christof	3-Sep-02/10:01 AM
Why do you care enough to comment?
Re: Thinkin! by KezzY20	3-Sep-02/9:36 AM
Oh my goodness. Mother goose is more poetry then this. 90% of this poem is either a preposition or a pronoun. Try adjectives, adverbs, nouns.
Re: Shelter by poetandknowit	3-Sep-02/9:32 AM
My skin blended from the hunter? this means camoflauge i'm sure, but 'from' makes it awkward. Otherwise perfect, as always.
Re: She Thinks Of Men Waiting by Christof	3-Sep-02/9:17 AM
I really do love your poetry. I carry your images around with me. The stablehand and now these men. The transposing of the stereotypes is wonderful, and myth is eveything. Will they say that, or is she insecure? Concise.
Re: Casus Belli by unknown	3-Sep-02/8:52 AM
Your taking a chance by standing on un-popular ground that's good. The poem needs weeding.
Re: the mattress is a magnet by silvertongueddevil	3-Sep-02/8:42 AM
Fantastic poetry. Your observations are always true and original. The title of this caught my eye.
Re: Bring me back to life by kawakurdi	3-Sep-02/8:30 AM
"renew my address" is a good line. The rest is too cliche.
Re: Oh So! by KezzY20	3-Sep-02/8:28 AM
Yuck.
Re: in the eye of the stone dragon: by Sapphire	3-Sep-02/8:16 AM
Well this is erotic but the salted tongue thing is too comical.
Re: Conversation Piece by timfowler	3-Sep-02/7:48 AM
Nice, The :'s and the ;'s are distracting especially in the 1st & 2nd lines. Maybe they have some cryptic meaning I'm to obtuse to understand. In the last stanza the prep. phrase is so long I forgot what the subject of the sentence was. Awkward. Nice but awkward.