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Conversation Piece (Free verse) by timfowler
I speak to you: You echo: return, replenish; Ground that is so gained, so reclaimed makes the gulf between us the merest breath of air. I hear you: You spoke: discovered, dispelled; walked the high tide's narrow mark, brought doubt to break on rocks, shining with salt spray. You touch me: I, fulfilled, freed by childhood's gentle candour, an essence drop by drop, will remember tomorrow.

Down the ladder: Life is freedom

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Arithmetic Mean: 3.4
Weighted score: 4.809275
Overall Rank: 10997
Posted: September 3, 2002 2:43 AM PDT; Last modified: September 3, 2002 2:43 AM PDT
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[4] god'swife @ 209.179.211.114 | 3-Sep-02/7:48 AM | Reply
Nice, The :'s and the ;'s are distracting especially in the 1st & 2nd lines. Maybe they have some cryptic meaning I'm to obtuse to understand. In the last stanza the prep. phrase is so long I forgot what the subject of the sentence was. Awkward. Nice but awkward.
[7] <~> @ 167.206.181.179 | 3-Sep-02/7:49 AM | Reply
i'd remember it forever
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