i would have you

Member since 2002 · Posted 11 May 2002 · 6 comments

i would have you in the heavy felt of an overcoat the wet heat has you in thin blue with bare arms and bare legs languishing on the sofa while i hang limply across an armchair we speak slowly, comfortably about people and events under your words through your shirt i recall you bathed standing in thick steam, modest whisps dispersing how does an image drown the sound of your voice?

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6 comments

[8] Shar 21-May-02/12:01 PM Reply

I like this--think it might be stronger with the last lines as a statement instead of a question.

[6] ==Doylum 4-Aug-02/2:26 PM Reply

not as naughty as some of you others, make them more dirty i like that.

[8] god'swife 5-Sep-02/9:43 AM Reply

This is gorgeous. This devil has his charms.

[8] Christof 5-Sep-02/9:50 AM Reply

I like this a lot - very suggestive and poised

[8] tuthaliash 11-Jan-04/8:35 AM Reply

This is beautiful...intimate and subtly sexy.

[10] <{Baba^Yaga}> 11-Jan-04/12:32 PM Reply

Very good.