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i would have you (Free verse) by silvertongueddevil
i would have you in the heavy felt of an overcoat the wet heat has you in thin blue with bare arms and bare legs languishing on the sofa while i hang limply across an armchair we speak slowly, comfortably about people and events under your words through your shirt i recall you bathed standing in thick steam, modest whisps dispersing how does an image drown the sound of your voice?

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.25
Weighted score: 5.220199
Overall Rank: 4332
Posted: May 11, 2002 3:17 AM PDT; Last modified: May 11, 2002 3:17 AM PDT
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Comments:
[8] Shar @ 24.156.22.65 | 21-May-02/12:01 PM | Reply
I like this--think it might be stronger with the last lines as a statement instead of a question.
[6] ==Doylum @ 213.122.185.250 | 4-Aug-02/2:26 PM | Reply
not as naughty as some of you others, make them more dirty i like that.
[8] god'swife @ 209.179.213.11 | 5-Sep-02/9:43 AM | Reply
This is gorgeous. This devil has his charms.
[8] Christof @ 195.172.133.226 | 5-Sep-02/9:50 AM | Reply
I like this a lot - very suggestive and poised
[8] tuthaliash @ 24.165.92.14 | 11-Jan-04/8:35 AM | Reply
This is beautiful...intimate and subtly sexy.
[10] <{Baba^Yaga}> @ 24.126.116.54 | 11-Jan-04/12:32 PM | Reply
Very good.
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