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i would have you (Free verse) by silvertongueddevil

i would have you in the heavy felt of an overcoat the wet heat has you in thin blue with bare arms and bare legs languishing on the sofa while i hang limply across an armchair we speak slowly, comfortably about people and events under your words through your shirt i recall you bathed standing in thick steam, modest whisps dispersing how does an image drown the sound of your voice?

Shar 21-May-02/12:01 PM
I like this--think it might be stronger with the last lines as a statement instead of a question.




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