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Birthday Love (Other) by Tormentedsoul718
I see your smile and i see your eyes
And i feel a love for you arise
Its your birthday,and today is your day
I wanna make you happy but i don't know what to say
So i'll write you a poem to express myself
I love the way take my heart from itself
And how you make me smile when i'm down
I feel so lost when your not around
I hate when i hear your voice then i have to say bye
I promise i'll be there when u begin to cry
I'll wipe your tears away and hold you tight
I'm promising you,that i'll make everything alright
And i'm promising that i'll be there for you
I also promise that i will stay true
I'll be yours,and you'll be mine,we'll be together
I'll be by your side no matter what the weather
I'll miss you when you not there to hold
Without you my summer feels so cold
I just met you,but this i feel,and i mean all of this
And your the reason why all of this exists
Happy birthday,i hope this makes you smile
And i hope this makes your day worthwhile
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Arithmetic Mean: 7.0
Weighted score: 5.2384057
Overall Rank: 4022
Posted: September 4, 2002 12:57 AM PDT; Last modified: September 4, 2002 6:53 PM PDT
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rework on this.repetitions of feelings could be expressed with variety of words and images.