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Birthday Love

Member since 2002 · Posted 4 Sep 2002 · Edited 4 Sep 2002 · 3 comments

I see your smile and i see your eyes And i feel a love for you arise Its your birthday,and today is your day I wanna make you happy but i don't know what to say So i'll write you a poem to express myself I love the way take my heart from itself And how you make me smile when i'm down I feel so lost when your not around I hate when i hear your voice then i have to say bye I promise i'll be there when u begin to cry I'll wipe your tears away and hold you tight I'm promising you,that i'll make everything alright And i'm promising that i'll be there for you I also promise that i will stay true I'll be yours,and you'll be mine,we'll be together I'll be by your side no matter what the weather I'll miss you when you not there to hold Without you my summer feels so cold I just met you,but this i feel,and i mean all of this And your the reason why all of this exists Happy birthday,i hope this makes you smile And i hope this makes your day worthwhile

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[n/a] vulcan 4-Sep-02/1:29 AM Reply
without -you-I suppose my summer...?
rework on this.repetitions of feelings could be expressed with variety of words and images.
[10] god'swife 4-Sep-02/11:42 PM Reply
Tormentedsoul718, I'd ream you a hole but there's no need for debate. It's plain to see you're an inadequate fake. Go forever pretending that this isn't you, but please straighten your costume, your mask's all askew.
[10] sk8boardandpoems 1-Mar-03/12:16 PM Reply
AHHH yet another 10 i wish i could write as half as good as you do..your poems are so expressive and meaningful..10 all the way