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Breakfast in Bed (Free verse) by brazen
Morning airs clear the table, Your smile breakfast for my eyes, Almost everything was over easy, But recently our shit is scrambled, And I find you hard to swallow. As days go on, And weeks pass by, Its been easier to say goodbye, Grown strong alone, With peace of mind, My hunger filled from time to time, By the secret stash you left behind, Where now the only thing I fear, Is waking the fire on the range, And sitting for a real meal.

Up the ladder: Fake Happiness
Down the ladder: Birthday Love

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Arithmetic Mean: 7.0
Weighted score: 5.2384057
Overall Rank: 4021
Posted: August 24, 2002 7:53 PM PDT; Last modified: August 24, 2002 7:53 PM PDT
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[8] <{Baba^Yaga}> @ 24.126.113.154 | 25-Aug-02/8:38 AM | Reply
hey, this is great! it reminds me of..my empty stomach rollllinggg.ahh food help, i writed to longed this passing nite. my colon is fecund in anticipation...8/10
[10] deleted user @ 24.167.109.163 | 29-Aug-02/7:28 PM | Reply
good
[9] Christof @ 195.172.133.226 | 10-Sep-02/7:32 AM | Reply
Your food metaphor works really well. the first stanza is impressively tight - think if you left it at that you'd have a good poem as well.
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