on Fake Happiness by WithoutLife
9 Jan 2004, 8:10 PM
AH! I love this piece! ..so sad, but the lines
"Friends enjoy the sweet snacks of our get together,
But numbness has seized my taste buds." ...amazing!
whoever gave you a one - THEY should be the ones' in sadness, not you.
"Friends enjoy the sweet snacks of our get together,
But numbness has seized my taste buds." ...amazing!
whoever gave you a one - THEY should be the ones' in sadness, not you.
on Tragic Love by WithoutLife
9 Jan 2004, 8:33 PM
once again... amazed by your words
on Endless Sleep by WithoutLife
9 Jan 2004, 8:41 PM
..so basically you are sad/mad about waking up in the morning, so you go back to sleep and become happy again? I feel the same way... everyone does. haha
on Soft Speak; Hard Emotion by Blindpoetry
2 Feb 2004, 8:22 PM
Wow... A 0?
Please post what I did wrong, or what I need to work on. please? thanks.
Please post what I did wrong, or what I need to work on. please? thanks.
on Beauty Sleep by Billy Biff-Chin
4 Feb 2004, 3:49 PM
on A Different Point Of View by Billy Biff-Chin
4 Feb 2004, 3:51 PM
on Digging A Grave by Billy Biff-Chin
4 Feb 2004, 3:52 PM
on Soft Beak; Hard lotion by Bachus
4 Feb 2004, 7:43 PM
hahahaha!
Nice parody...
Nice parody...
on Ducks With AIDs (a feeble attempt of something different) by Blindpoetry
6 Feb 2004, 3:27 PM
oops I over-looked a typo.
"says" in the 28 days later part is really "days"
sorry.
"says" in the 28 days later part is really "days"
sorry.
on some deleted poem
6 Feb 2004, 8:00 PM
"Do you jerk, jerk
Jerk jerk jerk it,
Before or after here?"
well... I've never really seen one word repeated 5 times in a row and in the same stanza. Kinda odd, dontcha think?
Jerk jerk jerk it,
Before or after here?"
well... I've never really seen one word repeated 5 times in a row and in the same stanza. Kinda odd, dontcha think?
on “I’ll Drop You Off At The Next Corner” by Blindpoetry
8 Mar 2004, 7:32 PM
Ok, obviously ,what i thought was good wasn't good.
:-/
I know this isn't poetry, but can anyone donate critiquing? I'm desperate, now, for this one.
:-/
I know this isn't poetry, but can anyone donate critiquing? I'm desperate, now, for this one.
on Colors Collide by Blindpoetry
25 Mar 2004, 7:42 PM
When colors collide and make one color, it will turn into a different color, correct? ... and if all the colors in the world collided, then the resulting color would, in fact, be black. Black meaning confusion and distaste, maybe? ...you know that if you mix the colors that they will all turn black, but you don't know why...
Kind of like this poem. I 'collided' all of my thoughts and made them turn into a 'black' color... Confusion and distaste, if not any other adjective.
You know that if you mix all of your thoughts togather, they won't make any sense, but you don't know why.
Or maybe we do.
Because the words don't make sense? ... but colors make sense. You see the black, don't you? ... and you see the words.
So you don't know why. You see the words. You see the black.
You don't understand why the words don't make sense. Why can't they be re-arranged to make sense?
...Why is the color black the resulting color? ... Why not pink, blue, brown, red, purple? ...
Eh... Thats how i think of the poem and how i named it... - of course, this could make no sense, whatsoever and I could be making a fool of myself (which is was i'm feeling right now) .... But... I think its healthy to express my thoughts every once in a while, don't you think?
Kind of like this poem. I 'collided' all of my thoughts and made them turn into a 'black' color... Confusion and distaste, if not any other adjective.
You know that if you mix all of your thoughts togather, they won't make any sense, but you don't know why.
Or maybe we do.
Because the words don't make sense? ... but colors make sense. You see the black, don't you? ... and you see the words.
So you don't know why. You see the words. You see the black.
You don't understand why the words don't make sense. Why can't they be re-arranged to make sense?
...Why is the color black the resulting color? ... Why not pink, blue, brown, red, purple? ...
Eh... Thats how i think of the poem and how i named it... - of course, this could make no sense, whatsoever and I could be making a fool of myself (which is was i'm feeling right now) .... But... I think its healthy to express my thoughts every once in a while, don't you think?
on Watching The Rose Grow by Blindpoetry
31 Mar 2004, 5:36 PM
- I guess I forced rhyming to much... But everything sounded so much in tune to the rhythm I have in my head. So, I'm keeping it. And I also love what I wrote about. It's not sad, not angery, but a bit happy. Almost, but not to much into the happy mix. Just right outside the door. - But I wrote this in a cheery mood, so... what does that have to say?
on Help Me Water The Garden by Blindpoetry
13 Apr 2004, 11:58 AM
a bit weird looking, eh?
The third stanza is supposed to have four lines
The third stanza is supposed to have four lines
on some deleted poem
21 Apr 2004, 5:51 PM
8 - 2 - 3?
For some reason, I thought haikus were 5 - 7 - 5...
For some reason, I thought haikus were 5 - 7 - 5...
on some deleted poem
21 Apr 2004, 5:59 PM
wow, please explain your logic towards this haiku!
only two lines 7 - 6 - ??
Whoa... I must be trippin'
only two lines 7 - 6 - ??
Whoa... I must be trippin'
on To Be Happy by embersandenvelopes
25 Apr 2004, 9:42 AM
I got that Don't worry, be happy song stuck in my head after reading this...
on some deleted poem
25 Apr 2004, 9:46 AM
Very good.
Only thing I had a problem with was
'Let It Be' ... It just tickled my nerves a little. But thats just me. 0_o;
Only thing I had a problem with was
'Let It Be' ... It just tickled my nerves a little. But thats just me. 0_o;
on Jesus, I funneled enough beer to marry that? by Bachus
19 May 2004, 7:35 PM
your talking about the band, Audioslave, correct?
I believe that is one word... 'Audioslave'...
I believe that is one word... 'Audioslave'...
I don't think i understood
"Bury me
Six feet-deep, with care
Woulden't want anyone to find me
Life was way too fair" ... um, maybe thats just me.
or
"I didn't deserve to live on your Earth" ? ... I thought life was fair?
all in all, I liked it... just those lines, above, got me confused...