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23-May-04/2:08 PM |
what? no title?
I dun think you can falsly die, eh?
*shrugs* ... Nothing special... just the same cliche love poem like everyone else writes about in similar words and phrases to the point of being whenthe next time you write a love poem, it'll be considered plagarism...
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
25-May-04/9:47 AM |
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| Re: In Love as in Love by Everyone |
26-May-04/8:55 PM |
I felt that I was scammed by the hault of the ending...
But I really liked it, aside from that note.
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| Re: I love you by AskittlesK |
28-May-04/7:33 PM |
Funny...
I have a poem with the exactsame title.
such ciche'ness... -_-;
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| Re: Should A Ramble Make Sense? by Blindpoetry |
30-May-04/4:28 PM |
The rule is, killingjuliet, that you gotta support your opinion on why you put down a two.
Even if it is 'It just sucks', I really want to know.
:)
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| Re: 0 by MacFrantic |
17-Jun-04/11:26 PM |
I don't get how 0 relates to the poem. 0.o;
But i like it.
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| Re: Me by berdabear |
16-Sep-04/2:29 PM |
I liked this.
Except for the me be me me me be me see me thing you got going.
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27-Dec-04/9:39 AM |
Was good, but sort of got a little worse each stanza, in my opinion.
But still good enough for an 8.
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| Re: Writer's Block by Bhaskaryya |
27-Dec-04/9:54 PM |
I've seen this subject written a lot.
Then again. I write alot of angsty, crappy high school poems. I shouldn't be talking.
ur.
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| Re: Lovelier Than Love by Bhaskaryya |
28-Dec-04/10:43 PM |
Votes make it more clear and exact, depending on who comments.
I liked this a lot. Didn't spot any errors. (but was i actually looking? nope)
Flowed well.
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| Re: Rain by dancin_n_da_moonlite |
15-Jan-05/7:34 PM |
I would have really liked this more.
If it had more of a point. Maybe.
And if their is. I don't see it.
But I liked the way you wrote it. And what you used to make it so alternative.
So despite its lack in... reason. and. the why'ness.
Your creative bland Davey and Katie make up for it.
It's just so. Weird.
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15-Jan-05/7:53 PM |
I laughed and then sat for a second and thought about it.
Bacons not real food anymore?! I feel like that dog.
It's BACOOOON!!
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| Re: In The Beginning by Dovina |
15-Jan-05/8:10 PM |
Sounds like the yearly Bible Reader that always visited my Elementry and Middle School. lol
I didn't get the last line, though.
:-/
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16-Jan-05/8:18 AM |
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I thought the last stanza could have been different from the second stanza, but it's still nice. :)
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10-Feb-05/3:27 PM |
blatantly obviously, this isn't good.
The only good thing I found in this to my liking was
I could build them in pots
One by one
Drop by drop
The rest, I'm sorry to say, needs work.
You begin as if in a conversation and then randomly try to rhyme without much purpose - like a twelve year old.
Then you attempt to sound all knowingish in line four.
eeccchhh
Then somethingsoemthing about a bee.
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| Re: Step Up by Blindpoetry |
19-Feb-05/4:07 PM |
I was a freakin' tard and wrote a huge reply while not logged in. ...And it didn't register or something.
We've eliminated Anonymous comments? Crap. That bites.
So I'll say in short:
It's sort of random[ish] in the first stanza, but then i come to a point the rest of it. It's about how I am always openly opinionated with my friends, which turns into arguments and debates - which I love. And I encourage them to do so.. just..because.. It's fun for me. XD
Nothing really deep. At first it was, but then i was like... Eff the deepness, let me be real.
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| Re: He tells me to imagine... by RION12 |
19-Feb-05/9:00 PM |
Kind of blandish.
I agree with Dovina on this.
metaphors, similies, oxymorons, personification, ect. -they are your friends. ;)
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| Re: I⦠the blank paper of unsaid things by Prince of Void |
14-Apr-05/3:07 PM |
Unless my age deprives me of known knowledge, I thought that this was a very good piece.
Well, unique, anyways.
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| Re: a conversation by crooked_smile |
14-Apr-05/3:24 PM |
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
13-Jul-05/7:08 PM |
It's kind[of] like all your posted poems formed into one and this was the end result.
I might have liked this better without the first line.
And a few others
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