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Step Up (Free verse) by Blindpoetry
I've returned to my senses All sins well destroyed But oh no Look out Another obstacle to avoid! My mind glows and shines As the fearie, you, unwinds And eats all the butter Desend into bliss Find a way out Unpack all your fists Decide to run, uncontrollable hide I said find your way out Create ways to live - to die Shout all your mind Read and explain your favorable kind And Feather's in motion Falling all over the ground Just like your body Fragile, light angry, deployed and Another way to pout Another way to shout Another way to find your tuna fished route Loneliness and hungerness Please step up and shout...

Up the ladder: Women
Down the ladder: The Fence

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.2
Weighted score: 5.0238404
Overall Rank: 7413
Posted: February 17, 2005 7:09 PM PST; Last modified: February 17, 2005 7:09 PM PST
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[6] Dovina @ | 19-Feb-05/10:16 AM | Reply
The first verse is great, but what happens next? Misspelling and misgrammar to be sure, but what are you saying?
[8] RION12 @ | 19-Feb-05/3:22 PM | Reply
What are you trying to say? You most tell me. Email me and don't say any bad words in the email. It's my school email address and they don't let us say anything bad. That fucken sucks but i'm use to it.
[n/a] Blindpoetry @ | 19-Feb-05/4:07 PM | Reply
I was a freakin' tard and wrote a huge reply while not logged in. ...And it didn't register or something.

We've eliminated Anonymous comments? Crap. That bites.

So I'll say in short:
It's sort of random[ish] in the first stanza, but then i come to a point the rest of it. It's about how I am always openly opinionated with my friends, which turns into arguments and debates - which I love. And I encourage them to do so.. just..because.. It's fun for me. XD

Nothing really deep. At first it was, but then i was like... Eff the deepness, let me be real.
[8] RION12 @ > Blindpoetry | 19-Feb-05/4:18 PM | Reply
Oh so that is what it was about. Thanks for clearing that up for me. Well now that I know what it means and now that I read it again I think it's really cool. I rate a 8 now.
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