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Step Up (Free verse) by Blindpoetry I've returned to my senses
All sins well destroyed
But oh no
Look out
Another obstacle to avoid!
My mind glows and shines
As the fearie, you, unwinds
And eats all the butter
Desend into bliss
Find a way out
Unpack all your fists
Decide to run, uncontrollable hide
I said find your way out
Create ways to live - to die
Shout all your mind
Read and explain your favorable kind
And
Feather's in motion
Falling all over the ground
Just like your body
Fragile, light
angry, deployed and
Another way to pout
Another way to shout
Another way to find your
tuna fished route
Loneliness and hungerness
Please step up and shout...
Up the ladder:
The Fence
Down the ladder:
no title
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 5.2
Posted: February 17, 2005 7:09 PM PST; Last modified: February 17, 2005 7:09 PM PSTWeighted score: 5.0238404 Overall Rank: 7457 Comments:
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Dovina @ 12.72.8.90
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19-Feb-05/10:16 AM
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The first verse is great, but what happens next? Misspelling and misgrammar to be sure, but what are you saying?
What are you trying to say? You most tell me. Email me and don't say any bad words in the email. It's my school email address and they don't let us say anything bad. That fucken sucks but i'm use to it.
I was a freakin' tard and wrote a huge reply while not logged in. ...And it didn't register or something.
We've eliminated Anonymous comments? Crap. That bites. So I'll say in short: It's sort of random[ish] in the first stanza, but then i come to a point the rest of it. It's about how I am always openly opinionated with my friends, which turns into arguments and debates - which I love. And I encourage them to do so.. just..because.. It's fun for me. XD Nothing really deep. At first it was, but then i was like... Eff the deepness, let me be real.
Oh so that is what it was about. Thanks for clearing that up for me. Well now that I know what it means and now that I read it again I think it's really cool. I rate a 8 now.
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