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Step Up (Free verse) by Blindpoetry

I've returned to my senses All sins well destroyed But oh no Look out Another obstacle to avoid! My mind glows and shines As the fearie, you, unwinds And eats all the butter Desend into bliss Find a way out Unpack all your fists Decide to run, uncontrollable hide I said find your way out Create ways to live - to die Shout all your mind Read and explain your favorable kind And Feather's in motion Falling all over the ground Just like your body Fragile, light angry, deployed and Another way to pout Another way to shout Another way to find your tuna fished route Loneliness and hungerness Please step up and shout...

Dovina 19-Feb-05/10:16 AM
The first verse is great, but what happens next? Misspelling and misgrammar to be sure, but what are you saying?




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