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He tells me to imagine... (Free verse) by RION12
Here we are. On the phone, talking. I tell him my thoughts. He tells me his. We change subjects every few minutes. I then start to daydream. I forget what I'm doing. When I come backn to reality. I notice he is talking about sex. He tells me to imagine him pressing his body against mine. Him kissing my neck slowly. He tells me to imagine him rubing his hands all over me. In my head I say this is lust. At the same time I imagine everything he is saying. The images go through my head. I feel my body turn warm. My body feels so many feels at once.

Up the ladder: The Calling
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Arithmetic Mean: 5.8333335
Weighted score: 5.2241178
Overall Rank: 4306
Posted: February 19, 2005 2:51 PM PST; Last modified: February 19, 2005 2:51 PM PST
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[5] Dovina @ 12.72.12.72 | 19-Feb-05/8:22 PM | Reply
Said too plainly. Try for imaginative ways to say it.
[5] Blindpoetry @ 68.227.130.156 | 19-Feb-05/9:00 PM | Reply
Kind of blandish.
I agree with Dovina on this.
metaphors, similies, oxymorons, personification, ect. -they are your friends. ;)
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