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Ducks With AIDs (a feeble attempt of something different) (Free verse) by Blindpoetry This crazy monkey disease
Has spread throughout the world
From many horny people
To molested ducks
They lick an ashtray
As they get satisfaction
The ducks now have Aids
We have a new world distraction
Is it safe to duck hunt now?
If they see us, will they foam at the mouth?
Can we eat them and not get poisoned?
Maybe an Aids plague will start
Maybe it will happen twenty-eight days later
And to think this was all started
By a horny man
He was just looking for some fun
âDoingâ everything he can
Now the man has much regret
For molesting the duck
But still brags about his attempt
Of changing the whole science of a ducks buttâ¦
Up the ladder:
Rough Translation (Prose)
Down the ladder:
bel-air
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 6.0
Posted: February 6, 2004 3:07 PM PST; Last modified: February 6, 2004 3:44 PM PSTWeighted score: 5.119203 Overall Rank: 5687 Comments:
Very good. -8-
Sorry about plagiarising your other poems. I was just messing around to piss you off. This is a real improvement on your other poems. I agree with the other poets here that it's better to write about new, unexpected things than about stale and tired old subjects. It's better to write about something that will make everyone sit up and take notice. The idea of licking an ashtray "to get satisfaction" is surprising and interesting. The next lesson: learn to think beyond the obvious. I suggest you try to describe things in astonishingly accurate but unexpected ways. But don't take these poems to school. Teachers won't like you writing about ducks with AIDS. That's because teachers are narrow-minded and unimaginative fools with little aptitude for appreciating originality. That's a broad generalisation, but I remember how rubbish school can be.
hm... thanks.
I actually write 90% of my poems at school. I don't know why. Its hard for me to write here, at home, because I know my parents will pry in and think I'm spycotic. ...And I only wish your warning was sooner - one of my teachers saw my work once and next thing I knew, I was in a shrinks office. The dude was a freaked... ...so i keep under the radar...
My poemes are much better than yours.
"User can post new poetry" - show us.
No'm.
C'mon. There's two of you and only one of him. And can you beat a bit like "They lick an ashtray, as they get satisfaction"?? That's gold.
Thank you for making me realize that.
...As if that the list of twenty best poems weren't proof enough - or your overall average? heh.
Young sir, I must admonish you that in this constituency when a man rattles his sabre in your direction, it is not only proper but indeede requisite to rattle your owne sabre back at him. In fact, in the circumstance of such a supererogatory rattling of the sabre as we have seen here, it would not be at all out of line to slam one's pinte to the table, roar to one's feet sending the bench tumbling and the barmaids flying to the corners (hands trembling 'pon their expansive bosoms), and give the offending rattler a nick about the ear or nose.
I trust that in the future you will be more circumspect.
...so... in other words (whithout all these confusing five dollar words being thrown here) :
"Fight back, dammit!" yes.. I see your point. :)
A joke from this week's POPBITCH(http://www.popbitch.com):
A man walks into a brothel and says "I've only got a fiver - is there anything you can do for me?" The Madam says "yes", and gives him a duck. The man hands over the cash, and disappears upstairs with the duck. A couple of weeks later he comes back. "I've got a tenner this time." he says, "What'll that get me?" The madam hands the man another duck. "Hold on!" says the man, "How come this duck is a tenner when the other one was only a fiver? "They're both bloody ducks." "Ah yes, that's right", says the Madam, "But this one doesn't have AIDS."
I've heard a similar joke.
Only...without the AIDS part. o_0; 306 view(s)
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"says" in the 28 days later part is really "days"
sorry.