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Ducks With AIDs (a feeble attempt of something different) (Free verse) by Blindpoetry

This crazy monkey disease Has spread throughout the world From many horny people To molested ducks They lick an ashtray As they get satisfaction The ducks now have Aids We have a new world distraction Is it safe to duck hunt now? If they see us, will they foam at the mouth? Can we eat them and not get poisoned? Maybe an Aids plague will start Maybe it will happen twenty-eight days later And to think this was all started By a horny man He was just looking for some fun “Doing” everything he can Now the man has much regret For molesting the duck But still brags about his attempt Of changing the whole science of a ducks butt…

Billy Biff-Chin 7-Feb-04/1:58 AM
Very good. -8-

Sorry about plagiarising your other poems. I was just messing around to piss you off.

This is a real improvement on your other poems.

I agree with the other poets here that it's better to write about new, unexpected things than about stale and tired old subjects.

It's better to write about something that will make everyone sit up and take notice.

The idea of licking an ashtray "to get satisfaction" is surprising and interesting.

The next lesson: learn to think beyond the obvious. I suggest you try to describe things in astonishingly accurate but unexpected ways.

But don't take these poems to school. Teachers won't like you writing about ducks with AIDS. That's because teachers are narrow-minded and unimaginative fools with little aptitude for appreciating originality.

That's a broad generalisation, but I remember how rubbish school can be.




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