on A Plea To The Mother(Mother Earth) by Rainbow_chaser
28 Nov 2003, 8:16 PM
If mother is the the Earth - Who is the Father?? Dont tell me they are the same:o)
on People of Discord by ShaNoN+960317485
28 Nov 2003, 8:32 PM
We dont need an Antichrist to bring any apocalyptic end â we have our own Leaders to do the Job better then him
on An Ode to Gobbling by horus8
29 Nov 2003, 4:53 AM
good insanity in a big bang:o)
on some deleted poem
29 Nov 2003, 7:04 AM
been reading up on u, have 2 say u know more than u let us read. Like you style - just wondering if ever wud decide to fiddle a different tune ( not that am complaining) but just asking ennu:o)
on some deleted poem
29 Nov 2003, 7:06 AM
:o)
on In my train-IN by ShaNoN+960317485
16 Dec 2003, 11:45 PM
Srry that i cant b here in Poemranker more often - been in a training n still am. Hope 2 read ya guys/gals stuff once i finish this arse grinding.
Cheers friends
Cheers friends
on Love Is In The Air by Blindpoetry
27 Dec 2003, 5:23 AM
sounds more like a craving to me - wud never call it love
on If I can't swim there I'll float by <{Baba^Yaga}>
27 Dec 2003, 5:28 AM
more like you'd be crazy, cold and wishing you be dead.
on Modern Man by ShaNoN+960317485
20 Dec 2003, 12:27 AM
Ye a modern man with schooling we all shall aspire for...
on If you pimp me I'll stay Walter by Shardik
20 Dec 2003, 12:36 AM
Must u always spoil Easter Shardik? You and your Walter, with a six penny pole thats been dead fr a decade...
:o)
:o)
on Surfacing by <{Baba^Yaga}>
20 Dec 2003, 12:59 AM
Hello Dear. how u doing??
I see that you also talk to a DICK, Casually caressing it :o)
Well dear dont know much abt what u try us to c... so i cud say Surfacing is a person & his penis relationship..
the reasons been:
1-'I find you a giver': a giver o sperm
2-'warm to the touch': it sure is warm
3-'and a free radical': yes has a will of its own (i know)
4-'Curly long & supple': During the placid state its skin is surly coiled .
5- the rest put forth the reverie of thoughts of the person, claiming that though he had kept Mr.Penis to himself its use liberates him & lets him feel love â which hence he claims Mr.Penis âyou are the worldsâ.
Sounds funny dho...but i have an evil mind & my Mr.Penis is also just the same;o)
A cool verse even if i ignore this complex inference..
Take a 9 baby..
I see that you also talk to a DICK, Casually caressing it :o)
Well dear dont know much abt what u try us to c... so i cud say Surfacing is a person & his penis relationship..
the reasons been:
1-'I find you a giver': a giver o sperm
2-'warm to the touch': it sure is warm
3-'and a free radical': yes has a will of its own (i know)
4-'Curly long & supple': During the placid state its skin is surly coiled .
5- the rest put forth the reverie of thoughts of the person, claiming that though he had kept Mr.Penis to himself its use liberates him & lets him feel love â which hence he claims Mr.Penis âyou are the worldsâ.
Sounds funny dho...but i have an evil mind & my Mr.Penis is also just the same;o)
A cool verse even if i ignore this complex inference..
Take a 9 baby..
on Digging A Grave by Blindpoetry
20 Dec 2003, 1:14 AM
And stop it shall? i dont know i can fullfill ya request fr critic i am not that gud...but i think each of us can help eachh other..
for starters:
1-"I'm trying to do the same with this bad memory" wud b better if u did away with 'with this bad', it kinda drags the idea.
2-"The grave is taking out the sad" i think i understand what you mean - but a little rearranging cud/might make it better
On the whole the piece aint super nor is it bad..enough fr me 2 give u a 10 atleast..
:o) TC
for starters:
1-"I'm trying to do the same with this bad memory" wud b better if u did away with 'with this bad', it kinda drags the idea.
2-"The grave is taking out the sad" i think i understand what you mean - but a little rearranging cud/might make it better
On the whole the piece aint super nor is it bad..enough fr me 2 give u a 10 atleast..
:o) TC
on Questions Need Answers by Blindpoetry
20 Dec 2003, 1:19 AM
Leave it b as it is...
A question i can ask is, u trying 2 be a rapper cause me think u tryin/is sounding a itsy like one:o)
i stopd at "The rain has drained " otherwise OK on my book
A question i can ask is, u trying 2 be a rapper cause me think u tryin/is sounding a itsy like one:o)
i stopd at "The rain has drained " otherwise OK on my book
on I'm A Root by Blindpoetry
20 Dec 2003, 1:24 AM
Ya i know what it is u sez . meself is living in Maldives, a small land where small is populaz n nobody goez..Little ground 2 cover no place to trot...Yez i understand whats u got...
:o)
:o)
on some deleted poem
27 Dec 2003, 3:26 AM
another in the Shuushin style, great to read n better to hold dear to keep
on Dream Me by jasondingus
27 Dec 2003, 5:21 AM
Lets Dream me giving you a ten not a nine
on It's lonely at the top by Jeremi B. Handrinos
27 Dec 2003, 6:12 AM
ok u have my attention on this one - hows abt a freakin 10
on Advice to poets I am passing on from CHARLES DARWIN by Plaidypus
27 Dec 2003, 8:54 PM
true 2 the font that ye typed
on Santaâs Journal 25thDec2003 by ShaNoN+960317485
29 Dec 2003, 1:31 AM
Was sitting on it since 25thDec, but did not find time till now. Hope it was a great Holiday n Happy New Year to all o'ya.
Cheers
Cheers
on No more goodbye by ShaNoN+960317485
2 Feb 2005, 4:52 AM
Its been a while but hope you guys are doing fine -
Cheers ShaNoN
Cheers ShaNoN