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In my train-IN (Free verse) by ShaNoN+960317485 Stuck, stuck I am herein stuck
In drones of insignificants little hut
Here I am, here sit I must
Yawning, rubbing scuffling my rump
Here am stuck with no place to run
Day in to the set of the several suns
Over the darkness I carry my brunt
Sickness and in pain, in shine or rain
Come here I must, yes I must
To leviathan my knowledge in my crown
Yes to this place I must come
Yet my set of day I will stifle a yawn
Swallow a breath thence call in whispers clause
Stuck I am in this schooling for a betterment
For which over the seas that I hath come
Up the ladder:
Powerless Dreamer
Down the ladder:
broken pieces of a candy heart
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 6.0
Posted: December 16, 2003 11:42 PM PST; Last modified: December 16, 2003 11:42 PM PSTWeighted score: 5.119203 Overall Rank: 5763 Comments:
All I could picture was Yoda rubbin his bum...
mmmmgghhh - stuck i am young skywalker - bored, bored I am with this trainin - mmmgmgghhhh
may the force b with ya little bum 2:o) cause Frodo hath already put off the war of the ages pass whilst he hath done his frolic in the mount of doom...just as dare gather our bundles and hang our socks fr the Christmas come...HO ho n a lota cheers 2 ya all on Christmas that tumbles to ye door front...I give ya'll a wonderful years End 2....
cute, could do with being less dense on the page, some stanzas and punctuation maybe.
The rhythm is the best thing 'sit I must'? perhaps: I must/sit yawning, rubbing scuffling my rump.
hello richa - sad that i didnt ya, but the trainer ws pokin her nose abt so i got it down as it came 2 me n put it down on the site.
Yet smote be i fr not taking time to reflect...cheers:o)
Guerrilla warfare takes dedication and well to do parents.
of which i hope u hv the total sum 2, cause i have it all n much more:o)
What are those #'s after your name for?
The numbers reflect my home number - just fr identity sake, cause there are lota people named Shanon...
But if u dare 2 contact me direct use me HP# +960708922. :o) 211 view(s)
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Cheers friends