Re: Metametahaiku by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	7-Mar-04/6:32 PM
Apparently.
Re: metahaiku by ex0teric	7-Mar-04/8:14 AM
five, seven then five - do you need an abacus? I counted this thrice.
Re: Woman in the purple cotton jacket(repaired) by INTRANSIT	7-Mar-04/7:41 AM
I'm fine up to "I wretched", and you throwing a pineapple slice - that's just sad, IT. The reader ends up feeling more pity for the author. I'm fine with the prosthetic wielding lady, that is at least an interesting vignette.
Re: I could rule myself by fevriere	7-Mar-04/7:36 AM
very nice: "My touch is toxic and abundant", and I like much of the other descriptions, too. The lack of enjambment... I don't think it does much for you in this case. And I agree with half of what Zodiac says, and I'm fine with "ouverture"
Re: a comment on Early Morning by fevriere	3-Mar-04/10:22 AM
[slaps forehead] oh yeah.
Re: a comment on Early Morning by fevriere	2-Mar-04/6:11 PM
Roger that(than-Q) - btw, I like that whole phonetic spelling thing - gonna use that someplace (hey, when a guy writes a poem a day he can get pretty desperate - its actually not a terrible idea. I wonder if it's been done? Musta been).
Re: Pop the Pill by etherealmaiden	2-Mar-04/6:07 PM
Was liking it until "My reality's blurred " then it lost its charm.
Re: where to go by AskittlesK	2-Mar-04/6:06 PM
Immediately turned off by seein "Purple" and "hazey" together - but I'll keep reading... hmmm. I like the last two lines - but I still don't know what it was about.
Re: I Remember Thinking by BrandonW	2-Mar-04/6:04 PM
excellent (period, full fucking stop).
Re: Cutters Part II The Recut (Limerick Triplet) by Shardik	2-Mar-04/6:03 PM
"stepped upon a landmina." - okay, thats brilliant. The rest, gradually less so - but still a -10- if ever I saw one.
Re: Uncle Sam Is Dead by Lenore	2-Mar-04/6:02 PM
Gawd. That's long. I know, you get that alot.
Re: a comment on Early Morning by fevriere	2-Mar-04/5:59 PM
Yeah.. thanks for that...
Re: Early Morning by fevriere	2-Mar-04/10:57 AM
I like the accentuation of key words with the capitalization, and if you did that on purpose, then I'm fine, too, with the punctuation. Though I know that some will be put off by it - hey this is not sculpting (despite the similarities); where we can't ignore the laws of physics and invent materials and have them hover over the piece blinking in and out from multiple dimensions - this is poetry. And we can very easily fuck with those "laws". So, having said that I like the mechanics of it - I'm a bit put off by the first line, and therefore the rational for the rest. I just don't believe this dumbing-down of god-like sensations to a human level (and this is from a guy who doesn't believe in god). I think it's fixable by making it a lesser diety (stick an article in there), and maybe by shading the perspective a little (not sure exactly how to do that). I may be the only one bothered by it, dunno - it still could appeal to a broader audience. extra points for style.
Re: Timmy by richa	2-Mar-04/10:18 AM
sod[s]? I like the cadence of this very much - for me it's the subtle rhyme with talk/part, which was worth repeating. But what is it with Tims and holes? http://www.poemranker.com/poem-details.jsp?id=79557
Re: At The Edge of Sleep by GregDeEgg	29-Feb-04/5:38 PM
hey, not bad. not bad at all.
Re: terraza pizza by daniella	29-Feb-04/5:23 PM
You didn't like the kitten?? What was wrong with the cute kitty?
Re: The Ghost of Sarah Gyllenhall by wilco	29-Feb-04/10:11 AM
works for me.
Re: simply missing by daggatolar	28-Feb-04/4:09 PM
I really like this: "Who is after me My own me after me" lots of originality here.
Re: Little Tounge by Figure 8	28-Feb-04/7:35 AM
rename it with someting to do with fire and you'll almost have something. or a dragon. and add another stanza. btw, "mouth" (as you spell it) should be "muthge"
Re: Seven by toker071	28-Feb-04/7:21 AM
Tonka trucks, pigtails you can use my favorite one - castles in the sand