replying on Buried pyramid by zodiac
17 Mar 2004, 4:38 PM
sure. Rhyming prose. Got it.
on Buried pyramid by zodiac
17 Mar 2004, 2:32 PM
Nice details.
It's good prose Zodiac - what's the translation?
It's good prose Zodiac - what's the translation?
on What is the use of the lid? by A. Nomaly
16 Mar 2004, 12:01 PM
only one person I know ever uses the word "lacquered", but this has nothing to do with ass....
or does it...
or does it...
replying on Your silhouette still drinks at my table by Don-Quixote
14 Mar 2004, 12:26 PM
Where, please, did you get your form rules from?
on My Boyfriend's Afro Pick by horus8
13 Mar 2004, 5:29 PM
people still wear those things? Horry shirt, what a roosah.
on Woman in the purple cotton jacket(repaired) by INTRANSIT
13 Mar 2004, 8:18 AM
I guess I liked it better when you threw the pineapple at her head.
on The Destination of the Unborn Child by DeadtotheWorld
12 Mar 2004, 11:52 AM
Title rocks.
replying on Aesgntor by MacFrantic
11 Mar 2004, 8:01 PM
not too shabby at all! Just gets a little busy, but its quite an epic.
on Aesgntor by MacFrantic
11 Mar 2004, 7:13 AM
Flows fairly well - thinking "Sancturies" should not be plural, but possessive.
Got pulled right through the first third, (was thinking, "this is a ten, this is a ten") then I had trouble following the story ("...9....8...") - might be more complex than it needs to be?
How does one pronounce "Aesgntor?"
Got pulled right through the first third, (was thinking, "this is a ten, this is a ten") then I had trouble following the story ("...9....8...") - might be more complex than it needs to be?
How does one pronounce "Aesgntor?"
Is not too bad, really.
I hesitate slightly at some of the rhymes (arrive and alive) in particular and a couple grammar issues (...essay fast - fast wants to be an adverb and is not) - and I'm usually pretty easy going with that kind of thing in poetry.
It does a nice job at conveying the loss
I hesitate slightly at some of the rhymes (arrive and alive) in particular and a couple grammar issues (...essay fast - fast wants to be an adverb and is not) - and I'm usually pretty easy going with that kind of thing in poetry.
It does a nice job at conveying the loss
replying on Woman in the purple cotton jacket(repaired) by INTRANSIT
9 Mar 2004, 7:41 PM
hey - thanks.
replying on Metametahaiku by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
8 Mar 2004, 4:47 AM
and your predictable retort - the other angle was that I'm referring to my own included haiku.
And thank you for showing me the word "Limpest" for the first time in print.
And thank you for showing me the word "Limpest" for the first time in print.