| Re: Cicada Years by seanlb1 |
24-May-04/8:43 AM |
Some nice angles in there, I find myself wondering what's it all about? A feel good poem well made.
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| Re: a comment on Reflections of the Living Dead by SomeKindofPoet |
22-May-04/7:47 PM |
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| Re: a comment on Catharsis by wilco |
22-May-04/12:46 PM |
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| Re: a comment on Catharsis by wilco |
22-May-04/12:45 PM |
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YEP - I'm an idiot that's why i didn't say it in the first comment...
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| Re: a comment on Catharsis by wilco |
22-May-04/12:36 PM |
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I'm thinking the last "upwards" slot could be better used as well.
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| Re: Catharsis by wilco |
22-May-04/12:35 PM |
Yep, thats a good one; good use of the form.
Consider replacing "Walking", it's implied and the space could be better used to express the mood.
the wine/mine rhyme, btw is a good coupling and the long "i" sounds work well.
when you say "contemplating a swift descent" are you implying she will go down [on you] quickly (or vice versa), or are you saying something will be leaving soon and quickly?
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| Re: Ten by horus8 |
22-May-04/5:24 AM |
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A fresh thought well said.
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| Re: a comment on Tony Blair's sagging purple johnny by Stephen Robins |
21-May-04/4:43 PM |
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You don't understand the comment because you are lack the ability to grasp anything beyond the length of your anemic dick, its half-scabbed pee-hole the only thing you have for a mouth, and its empty ball-sack the only thing you have to contain your thin mucous like brain.
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| Re: a comment on Tony Blair's sagging purple johnny by Stephen Robins |
21-May-04/4:38 PM |
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Perhaps by your standards - but that doesn't mean much does it? I would just have to have used some cockney lilt and maybe the word cunt and it would be closer to your, again meaningless, ideal.
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| Re: Tony Blair's sagging purple johnny by Stephen Robins |
21-May-04/1:23 PM |
Another diaper-full of the best you can do.
And you spelled "color" wrong, again.
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| Re: Something's gone wrong by zodiac |
21-May-04/3:45 AM |
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eh. I thik you did some wrong things in here on purpose, but its popular; generated lots of interest and votes - so 3 points for that.
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| Re: a comment on Sarah's Song by wilco |
18-May-04/6:57 PM |
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Agreed - I gave you the benefit of the doubt with the nine.
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| Re: Sarah's Song by wilco |
18-May-04/6:52 PM |
Pretty.
I'd like it flow a little more - quite a few one line sentences and the many prepositions, articles and pronouns don't help the cause.
Still, some lovely language in there.
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| Re: On the Discovery of the Hated Tree and Another T.V. Dinner by MacFrantic |
17-May-04/9:10 AM |
Arborists, I think. And "we [treepeople]"
Good rhyme with contraire. Nice title.
Ever read "poison tree"?
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| Re: Washing-up Hands and Disgruntled Underarms by fevriere |
14-May-04/2:06 PM |
did you mean "hart" is in a male [red] deer?
quite nice, though maybe a few too many "is"s and "was"s
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| Re: In the Land of Bob by Bobjim |
14-May-04/2:02 PM |
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| Re: Bashing through the woods by INTRANSIT |
14-May-04/12:53 PM |
This went completely over my head.
Here's a nine because I could never picture a snake with breasts, no matter how hard I tried - until now. Thank you.
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| Re: a comment on Ze German Poetry by Stephen Robins |
14-May-04/10:21 AM |
This one is pretty frickin dead on though, if not exactly in accent, certainly in flavor - you must admit.
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| Re: The Ballad of Fraser Allonby Q.C., Barrister-At-Law by wFraser Allonby Q.C.w |
14-May-04/8:46 AM |
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Hello Fraser! Welcome to Poemranker! Thanks for posting such a great poem! A/S/L?
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| Re: a comment on Obituary for the Moon by wilco |
10-May-04/7:20 PM |
Boggles my mind but I think nentwined has a purty good handle on it, on the big picture.
It affects everyone the same, so - no worries.
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