on Cicada Years by seanlb1
24 May 2004, 8:43 AM
Some nice angles in there, I find myself wondering what's it all about? A feel good poem well made.
replying on Reflections of the Living Dead by SomeKindofPoet
22 May 2004, 7:47 PM
Don't forget to flush.
Yep, thats a good one; good use of the form.
Consider replacing "Walking", it's implied and the space could be better used to express the mood.
the wine/mine rhyme, btw is a good coupling and the long "i" sounds work well.
when you say "contemplating a swift descent" are you implying she will go down [on you] quickly (or vice versa), or are you saying something will be leaving soon and quickly?
Consider replacing "Walking", it's implied and the space could be better used to express the mood.
the wine/mine rhyme, btw is a good coupling and the long "i" sounds work well.
when you say "contemplating a swift descent" are you implying she will go down [on you] quickly (or vice versa), or are you saying something will be leaving soon and quickly?
replying on Tony Blair's sagging purple johnny by Stephen Robins
21 May 2004, 4:43 PM
You don't understand the comment because you are lack the ability to grasp anything beyond the length of your anemic dick, its half-scabbed pee-hole the only thing you have for a mouth, and its empty ball-sack the only thing you have to contain your thin mucous like brain.
replying on Tony Blair's sagging purple johnny by Stephen Robins
21 May 2004, 4:38 PM
Perhaps by your standards - but that doesn't mean much does it? I would just have to have used some cockney lilt and maybe the word cunt and it would be closer to your, again meaningless, ideal.
on Tony Blair's sagging purple johnny by Stephen Robins
21 May 2004, 1:23 PM
Another diaper-full of the best you can do.
And you spelled "color" wrong, again.
And you spelled "color" wrong, again.
on Something's gone wrong by zodiac
21 May 2004, 3:45 AM
eh. I thik you did some wrong things in here on purpose, but its popular; generated lots of interest and votes - so 3 points for that.
replying on Sarah's Song by wilco
18 May 2004, 6:57 PM
Agreed - I gave you the benefit of the doubt with the nine.
on Sarah's Song by wilco
18 May 2004, 6:52 PM
Pretty.
I'd like it flow a little more - quite a few one line sentences and the many prepositions, articles and pronouns don't help the cause.
Still, some lovely language in there.
I'd like it flow a little more - quite a few one line sentences and the many prepositions, articles and pronouns don't help the cause.
Still, some lovely language in there.
on On the Discovery of the Hated Tree and Another T.V. Dinner by MacFrantic
17 May 2004, 9:10 AM
Arborists, I think. And "we [treepeople]"
Good rhyme with contraire. Nice title.
Ever read "poison tree"?
Good rhyme with contraire. Nice title.
Ever read "poison tree"?
on Washing-up Hands and Disgruntled Underarms by fevriere
14 May 2004, 2:06 PM
did you mean "hart" is in a male [red] deer?
quite nice, though maybe a few too many "is"s and "was"s
quite nice, though maybe a few too many "is"s and "was"s
on In the Land of Bob by Bobjim
14 May 2004, 2:02 PM
liking the title.
on Bashing through the woods by INTRANSIT
14 May 2004, 12:53 PM
This went completely over my head.
Here's a nine because I could never picture a snake with breasts, no matter how hard I tried - until now. Thank you.
Here's a nine because I could never picture a snake with breasts, no matter how hard I tried - until now. Thank you.
replying on Ze German Poetry by Stephen Robins
14 May 2004, 10:21 AM
This one is pretty frickin dead on though, if not exactly in accent, certainly in flavor - you must admit.
on The Ballad of Fraser Allonby Q.C., Barrister-At-Law by wFraser Allonby Q.C.w
14 May 2004, 8:46 AM
Hello Fraser! Welcome to Poemranker! Thanks for posting such a great poem! A/S/L?
replying on Obituary for the Moon by wilco
10 May 2004, 7:20 PM
Boggles my mind but I think nentwined has a purty good handle on it, on the big picture.
It affects everyone the same, so - no worries.
It affects everyone the same, so - no worries.