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Washing-up Hands and Disgruntled Underarms (Free verse) by fevriere
Scars won't fade fast
And in the summertime, the one on her cheek
Is bright as paint, is red as lips.
Her face refuses to be quiet:
she wishes her scar was white as milk
gentle; Godly; girly.
She wishes she was holding hands.
She wishes she was sharing kisses.
She wishes she was Audrey Hepburn.
Milky.
No, darling, the taste in her mouth is spicy and sour
And her palms sweat like butter in the heat.
No, darling, that girl's a bad bad one,
That girl's night inside.
She's not quite real yet.
She's no white hart.
She's no milk-weeping Virgin statue.
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Arithmetic Mean: 7.4
Weighted score: 5.286087
Overall Rank: 3746
Posted: May 14, 2004 2:07 AM PDT; Last modified: May 14, 2004 2:09 AM PDT
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quite nice, though maybe a few too many "is"s and "was"s