| Re: a comment on Guess the place! by Patsy |
18-Aug-04/5:54 PM |
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| Re: Guess the place! by Patsy |
17-Aug-04/10:04 PM |
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this, i think, goes further than other-of-i-have-seen. the "Maas" makes me want to guess in that direction, but i feel cautious tonight...
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| Re: today i just feel like swearing alot. But i won't. by Patsy |
9-Aug-04/12:09 PM |
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Much too many questions this raises.
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| Re: collars i have worn--exhibit 3 by Patsy |
11-May-04/8:21 AM |
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hmm. first things first---dare i say it? i demand the you!
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| Re: P.M.S. by Princess_Snowflake |
22-Jan-04/6:35 AM |
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| Re: Drying, Cracked Roots by AnotherNothing |
21-Jan-04/8:36 PM |
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Hmm. The thoughts are well-held in the beginning and end, but the phraseology might have been a little more flexible in the middle-part.
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| Re: The back of a shovel? by horus8 |
21-Jan-04/1:33 PM |
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hmm. imagery is intense, at any rate. for whatever that's worth. ^_^
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| Re: Fall of all by penguin fiend |
21-Jan-04/1:31 PM |
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hmm yes. know what you mean. what about constructive interference?
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| Re: Last Night by middenHeap |
21-Jan-04/1:26 PM |
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| Re: it's all about the aeroplanes by Patsy |
18-Jan-04/11:38 PM |
Snarkily enough, i was about to not-do anything out of caprice at not having a juicy walking-stick. but being gentle is good too, and so i do so in the end anyways.
You ascend higher in terms of all. i await future years with expectatory heart-leaps.
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| Re: Benedict Arnold by Justone |
18-Jan-04/10:48 PM |
"crystal smoke", "cardboard beneath", "slit my balloon, bleeding red as i fell"---these scintillate.
"glimpse of past/lessons for future": too much approaching clichee. but, overall, good. salutations.
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| Re: More same than before by Patsy |
4-Jan-04/12:26 AM |
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...they need point-fives when voting.
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| Re: (pieces, peaces) by Patsy |
4-Jan-04/12:24 AM |
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Again, this is possibly simply the fact of the near-full moon, but...intimations of the Other Side? or, to quote, "dustbunnies where there are none"?
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| Re: Returneth by Patsy |
4-Jan-04/12:05 AM |
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At this early hour, the poem's dichotomies seem tender, the self-interrogation nearly gentle. With the light of day the edges may turn hard and unjust, i know, but at the moment... Honest to (nearly) the core, i appreciate.
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| Re: Borders II by Patsy |
2-Nov-03/7:49 AM |
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Well, to leave this out would be too...conspicuous :), and so, I am here. I shall say simply that the internal stirrings this implies are not unknown to my precincts. And now, I shall leave the confessional, and go about my work. they really should have the option of point-fives when voting--I'm always caught between rounding up or rounding down.
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| Re: My Instructions or My Tongue In My Cheek? by Patsy |
2-Nov-03/7:42 AM |
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My commentating will come, yet! If I am free on Thursday, perhaps. But, until then, I must take pride in this poem, note the correlations to Francis' "Summons", and continue on...
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| Re: Recycle by Patsy |
2-Nov-03/7:40 AM |
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yowee. I apologize for the previous comment--now, a month and a half later, I come back to this, and it strikes me as very, very "good". It's just a month and a half too old for me, that's all. :)
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| Re: Recycle by Patsy |
14-Sep-03/4:09 PM |
"i am between your Seine and your Rhine"...
ah. if i might dare utter something akin to blasphemy, i'd say that's nearly better than whipped cream. :)
the rest of it, though.. other than "i am just with the rain..." and a few other gems.. when i remember you're capable of "Troublemaker"...i don't know.. it's just.. at the moment, when i'm somewhat sleepy, i'd be more liable to give it a
[we're sorry: it seems as though the user has left the workstation as he fears giving the poem cited a vote he will later regret. please try again later.]
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| Re: 30,000 feet by Patsy |
14-Sep-03/3:45 PM |
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"your lights, my stars"...i'm probably reading more into this than i should, but i find it rather meaningful. this profundity is of another type than the rest of your poem, so if i were to quote it in my style of profundity, i'd not contextualize. :) but, the same holds true for "i am in love with the beauty of your / ignorance" and for that matter, "only your intersections / mark". when fit with the rest of it, the external meaning i've added jars, somewhat.. but taken as a whole, i'd leave you with an 8.
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| Re: Troublemaker by Patsy |
31-Aug-03/7:20 AM |
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also, though: the title? "troublemaker"?
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