Re: Birth, school, work and death. by darby pyn	15-Jul-05/8:22 PM
The ending lines were like rapid fire- but climatically worthy. Were you disregarding where the line breaks fell? It seems like this would be more poignant if one didn't have to scroll around to read the lines, and if the line breaks were placed strategically.
Re: When the World Forgets by TLRufener	15-Jul-05/8:17 PM
I agree with jessicazee, you talked about a kind of pain, but I couldn't really empathize- even though I imagine it is real, in some respect, for you/your narrator.
Re: Only I wish I could say.. by PunkyPanda	15-Jul-05/8:14 PM
I didn't see the happy ending coming.
Re: Why I Bother by empire942	15-Jul-05/8:11 PM
I stay awake at night thinking about whey too, when I am not thinking of bulgar or tempeh or grape tomatoes or heartbreak.
Re: Moving Up by jessicazee	15-Jul-05/8:01 PM
nice collage of details
Re: Inoculation by bamf909	15-Jul-05/7:58 PM
funny, you should do public health commercials
Re: Winter Lands: I by http://bandgeek	7-Dec-03/6:59 PM
Winter Lands: II This winter, a new land to explore, suburban chickens peck over frozen ground. Salt water freezes on bluegreen estuary banks’ sloping glaze, as inviting as a waterslide in spite of eternal, internal struggle of salty ice. Clots of snow form on stilled river like frothing yeast in lukewarm water. Gentle spray over the dam freezes into frosty stalagmites: upside-down icicles reaching toward clouds. The traffic on Main Street comprises of privately owned pick up trucks with yellow plows attached on their way to rescue those who can pay. Shovelers relocate dense snow, one 12 x 16 x 8 inch rectangle at a time the satisfying fulfillment of metal scraping gravel struggles to be heard over obliviously aimed snowblower motors who fan their plumes of snow onto shovelers’ now diminutive accomplishments. In this land, it is so easy. Let the car hide under that mass, safety is not the certainty of an accessible city bus every fifteen minutes. Safety is hibernation behind storm windows among flannel and housecats, feeling assured, there is nothing to do out there anyway.
Re: museheart is internationally published by scitz	9-Sep-03/9:42 AM
It is called "the dozens".
Re: I Usually Wear Pants by razorgrin	9-Sep-03/9:39 AM
And why would they?
Re: (limits of ambition) by richa	9-Sep-03/9:34 AM
Is this a rewrite, seems like I've seen part of it before. Nice job.
Re: a comment on canto di desiderio by Bill Z Bub	9-Sep-03/9:22 AM
Sì, è limitato, ma quello fa parte del divertimento!
Re: canto di desiderio by Bill Z Bub	8-Sep-03/8:06 PM
La parte che ha tradotto correttamente era bella. L'ultima linea avete detto, "Sapete that urlano for you". Elaborereste su questa linea?
Re: A Lovely Surprise by ?-Dave_Mysterious-?	7-Sep-03/4:56 PM
I love the "crisply laid stool" part. They don't make toys like they used to!
Re: a comment on (untitled) by http://bandgeek	7-Sep-03/4:50 PM
postmodern? Ich auch.
Re: a comment on Babelfish Poetry (I): A pérola (Português) by Geschäftsreise	7-Sep-03/1:42 PM
na klar! Ever read DAvid Sedaris' "Me Talk Pretty One Day"?
Re: My Id and I by William Delacroix	7-Sep-03/1:34 PM
Very nice. I liked the simpler sections "My id and I..." contrasted with the more explanatory stanzas, and how the id induced desires lacked punctuation. You could turn this in for a Psychology 101 assignment.
Re: Babelfish Poetry (III): Segen (Deutsch) by Geschäftsreise	7-Sep-03/1:22 PM
Welcher bist du? Reisender? Arbeiter? Denker? Schöpfer, oder alles? Selbstportrait?
Re: Babelfish Poetry (I): A pérola (Português) by Geschäftsreise	7-Sep-03/7:19 AM
Welcher Fremdsprache? Nicht italienisch oder spanisch?
Re: a comment on (untitled) by http://bandgeek	7-Sep-03/7:10 AM
Du bist kein Deutscher, Freund. Keine "Infidelity" von diese Sprache. "Infidelity" ist Ehebruch. Aber, deine Nummern sagen "vergelten", und Ehebrecher.
Re: Babelfish Poetry (II): Rendu plus Doux (Français) by Geschäftsreise	7-Sep-03/6:45 AM
beau, dans cela a maladroitement traduit la manière.