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Moving Up (Free verse) by jessicazee
My mom was a secretary: nylons, travel plans, no Windows, pencils to sharpen, hairspray, the coffee - weak. At home her lists were in shorthand, curlicues behind numbers, more cigarettes, a Christmas list. Dictaphones on folder files losing to tape recorders, mimeographs siring copy machines, a hold button, shorter skirts, short haircuts, her own parking spot. A computer in color, typewriters to dust, look at the fax machine! Sunlight grew African violets in an office with a door. In rolling leather chairs, meetings and numbers okayed, a noble new title. Earning and getting, a notice, a thank you. A mug of her own, a soft pair of shoes.

Up the ladder: Suburban Spleen

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Arithmetic Mean: 7.0
Weighted score: 5.537883
Overall Rank: 2594
Posted: July 13, 2005 10:54 PM PDT; Last modified: July 13, 2005 10:54 PM PDT
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[9] http://bandgeek @ 216.195.164.111 | 15-Jul-05/8:01 PM | Reply
nice collage of details
[n/a] <~> @ 167.206.181.179 | 20-Jul-05/7:46 AM | Reply
not sure if the promotion is to her position at home, or if she's been promoted at work. other than that, i like what you've done. but that one part could be clearer.
[9] INTRANSIT @ 64.12.116.138 > <~> | 25-Jul-05/4:40 PM | Reply
That ambiguity works for me.
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