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Free verse № 128593

When the World Forgets

Member since 2004 · Posted 12 Jul 2005 · 2 comments

The world closes its eyes When the sun goes down The candles begin to sparkle And the moon starts to shine Lost and defenseless I roam alone and scared When the world forgets I become dust in the wind Eyes tightly closed I am swept under the rug But they’ll never miss me Because I am nothing The frozen cold breeze Leads me as a forgotten child When the world forgets I am cast off the road To make room Everyone pushes past And throws me aside for themselves When I am locked away and hidden They steal my soul When the world forgets I become a shadow chased by the sun All I know and can live Is darkness Evil thrives in my vacant shell As I commit crimes My self-control fades Just as my shadow And I crave every essence of hell When the world forgets Innocence disappears Each time the sun Erases the stars

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[6] jessicazee 13-Jul-05/11:06 PM Reply
The sentiment deserves more. And Kansas deserves credit for your "dust in the wind." However, I think your form and rhythm are smart. For whatever you take my opinion for.
[7] http://bandgeek 15-Jul-05/8:17 PM Reply
I agree with jessicazee, you talked about a kind of pain, but I couldn't really empathize- even though I imagine it is real, in some respect, for you/your narrator.