poemranker ::(limits of ambition) by richa

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Free verse № 64406

(limits of ambition)

Member since 2002 · Posted 9 Sep 2003 · 3 comments

the clock moves past eleven and none - the last silver hour of water ticks on. the seagulls have fattened with fish, the sea-wall shadows have feigned and failed to outgrow their columns, and this boy has grown so tall as the gravestone of his grandfather, we hope no further.

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[9] http://bandgeek 9-Sep-03/9:34 AM Reply
Is this a rewrite, seems like I've seen part of it before. Nice job.
[0] Bachus 9-Sep-03/10:55 AM Reply
Last line could be "Should this go further." Otherwise, I'll have you know. I think it's very good. As always.
[8] LuckyJoe 10-Sep-03/6:23 AM Reply
Very interesting.