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(limits of ambition) (Free verse) by richa

the clock moves past eleven and none - the last silver hour of water ticks on. the seagulls have fattened with fish, the sea-wall shadows have feigned and failed to outgrow their columns, and this boy has grown so tall as the gravestone of his grandfather, we hope no further.

Bachus 9-Sep-03/10:55 AM
Last line could be "Should this go further." Otherwise, I'll have you know. I think it's very good. As always.




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