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Winter Lands: I

Member since 2003 · Posted 7 Dec 2003 · 3 comments

Another winter, another home. Last winter, crisped through plowed lots to the bus stop. Artificial gaps in the snowbank, two feet across, served as meager public sidewalk. Uneven openings were trampled and kicked through the spattered gray bank next to bus route signs to expedite entry into a warm, musky haven of public transportation. Hoped for a few inches of fresh snow weekly to make soot blackened snow mountains “clean”. Not caring that come spring, warmer rains would reveal many horrors to unwitting pedestrian archeologists. Forgotten, but never lost; layers of salty sand, styrofoam coffee cups, bus transfer tickets, pink frozen vomit, faded mittens, condom wrappers. In that land, reassurance glowed every half hour. Plowtrucks’ yellow lights flickered into apartment rooms. Distant scraping sounded a friendly reminder: the safety of a city with parking bans.

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[n/a] http://bandgeek 7-Dec-03/6:59 PM Reply
Winter Lands: II

This winter,
a new land to explore,
suburban chickens
peck over frozen ground.
Salt water freezes on bluegreen estuary banks’
sloping glaze, as inviting as a waterslide
in spite of eternal, internal struggle of salty ice.
Clots of snow form on stilled river
like frothing yeast in lukewarm water.
Gentle spray over the dam freezes
into frosty stalagmites:
upside-down icicles reaching toward clouds.
The traffic on Main Street
comprises of privately owned
pick up trucks with yellow plows attached
on their way to rescue those who can pay.
Shovelers relocate dense snow,
one 12 x 16 x 8 inch rectangle at a time
the satisfying fulfillment of
metal scraping gravel struggles to be heard
over obliviously aimed snowblower motors
who fan their plumes of snow onto
shovelers’ now diminutive accomplishments.

In this land,
it is so easy.
Let the car hide under that mass,
safety is not the certainty
of an accessible city bus every fifteen minutes.
Safety is hibernation behind storm windows
among flannel and housecats,
feeling assured,
there is nothing to do out there anyway.
[10] The_Third_Isis 7-Dec-03/10:24 PM Reply
Yikes soooo glad I'm no where near any of that till after xmas I caould harly handle california..with out a human fur coat a few blankets and alot of what wet dreams become a reality. I;30 am and the warm breeze is fluttering my satin robe...sigh keep your cats warm, and thanks for the well writen reminder of why I dont like real winter's. Best wishes to you and a hot apple cider my friend cheers.I need to sleep with only one silk sheet and no dry heat,that makes my nosebleed yuck. A 10 and to all a goood night!
[9] Shardik 8-Dec-03/4:19 AM Reply
That was grooving. 9.