| Re: The Sinners Saloon by SupremeDreamer |
12-Sep-03/7:39 PM |
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Yes, I can see the source of your inspiration. I don't know about "sapless sinner"- I would think of your sinner more like a diabetic with an appetite for the sweet and decadent (but he/she would request the sour, for atonement purposes).
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| Re: a comment on maternal-infant bonding (rejection) by SupremeDreamer |
12-Sep-03/6:32 PM |
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I thought you'd birthed some infants from your (pleasingly) tight ("straight") anus, hence the deformed heads.
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| Re: a comment on Armageddon (I Am Mr. America) by SupremeDreamer |
12-Sep-03/6:25 PM |
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Yes, I quite agree that it is time for a different kind of judgment day poem. However, no thanks about the "communion" -I've been a vegetarian for more than 10 years- Jesus' rich meat might upset my stomach.
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| Re: maternal-infant bonding (rejection) by SupremeDreamer |
12-Sep-03/10:59 AM |
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Nice. I loved "their mewlings". Interesting coming from you- did some research, did you?
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| Re: Style by Nicholas Jones |
12-Sep-03/10:56 AM |
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| Re: Lifestyles of the ripe and glamourless by horus8 |
12-Sep-03/10:42 AM |
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The comments were as good as the poem. Quite a storyteller, you are.
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| Re: Dream by silvy |
12-Sep-03/10:30 AM |
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Would you rather have grammatical feedback than numerical scores?
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| Re: Quadroons by Shardik |
12-Sep-03/10:28 AM |
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I've never known a quadroon to be as black as night.
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| Re: Armageddon (I Am Mr. America) by SupremeDreamer |
12-Sep-03/10:21 AM |
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| Re: The Goodbye Hug by Amythest |
9-Sep-03/6:47 PM |
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This sounds a lot like one of those email chain letters that my sentimental co-workers send me. Is that what you were going for? I am sure it'd be appreciated in that genre.
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| Re: How to sleep sitting up by Bachus |
9-Sep-03/6:15 PM |
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That is great, but clean up the typos, especially if this is a serious tribute to someone.
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| Re: sick love by Nirvana13666 |
9-Sep-03/6:04 PM |
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Yikes. Hope this is fiction!
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| Re: Help The Aged by Mr Pig |
8-Sep-03/6:34 PM |
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I have a poem about a 89 year old client of mine who lives in an assisted living home, but you did such a good job of showing us this place and telling a story that I dare not post mine. Excellent. 10
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| Re: A new beginning by hobojo |
8-Sep-03/6:27 PM |
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| Re: An Offering to the Deity that is Me by razorgrin |
8-Sep-03/6:22 PM |
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If you don't like it, pass it on down the table.
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| Re: a comment on Peach (Revision) by http://mulberryfairy |
8-Sep-03/6:17 PM |
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Good call, I didn't even notice until you said it. I will certainly, contemplatively, seriously and harshly take a reluctantly adversarial look at my adverb problem.
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| Re: Walking Home by EAger to Offend |
8-Sep-03/10:40 AM |
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That was great. Well-written and descriptive. Loved the biblical allusions. Need an apostrophe in "township's rails" (6th stanza). 10
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| Re: a comment on Peach (Revision) by http://mulberryfairy |
7-Sep-03/7:54 AM |
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So, I revised it a bit, but don't get your hopes up.
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| Re: a comment on Blind Faith by NNirvana13666 |
6-Sep-03/10:12 AM |
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Well I guess you're a better man than me, to consider it good in spite of completely disagreeing with the subject, but then, I'm not a man, and I wouldn't have liked that poem even if it had spouted atheist rhetoric.
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| Re: a comment on What's World Peace? by DeadtotheWorld |
6-Sep-03/10:03 AM |
It is not paranoia, it is called the US Patriot Act II.
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