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The Sinners Saloon (Free verse) by SupremeDreamer
Here I sit, head hung in shame, next to father Patrick. Irish bastard.. God loves him anyway. "Give me Jesus on the rocks" "Sweet or Sour?" "Make that bastard bitter, he shouldnt be sweet for a sapless sinner like me." I slam the shots, eating the divine bread served like peanuts. Feeling the forgiveness, I smile and stumble out the bar feeling better than when I first came in.

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Arithmetic Mean: 8.0
Weighted score: 5.806824
Overall Rank: 1672
Posted: September 12, 2003 4:59 PM PDT; Last modified: September 12, 2003 4:59 PM PDT
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[9] http://mulberryfairy @ | 12-Sep-03/7:39 PM | Reply
Yes, I can see the source of your inspiration. I don't know about "sapless sinner"- I would think of your sinner more like a diabetic with an appetite for the sweet and decadent (but he/she would request the sour, for atonement purposes).
[n/a] SupremeDreamer @ > http://mulberryfairy | 12-Sep-03/7:52 PM | Reply
-nod- indeed. But to be more specific, im a man who loves to hear people cry out "YOU BASTARD!!!".

heh. :)
[10] Joe-joe @ > SupremeDreamer | 12-Sep-03/8:48 PM | Reply
I fucking love this one... and it sure beats the last time you were "inspired" by a piece I wrote. How many fucking people are floating around in that crafy little brain of yours. Like I sad to you before...I got to give you your propers... -10- (1st I've ever given)
[n/a] DreamerSupreme @ > Joe-joe | 12-Sep-03/11:12 PM | Reply
too many people.. its a city in my brain.. and something creeping around, and im gonna die.. very soon.. i can sense it.. yes..
[9] Jill Stockinger @ | 2-Jan-21/6:19 PM | Reply
Recommend an apostrophe for Sinners' Saloon-
(Saloon of Sinners)--what do you have against apostrophes?
Good poem.
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