Re: Towards the Sun or The keeper of the bay they call a pond by somemorepoetry	13-Dec-05/4:59 PM
very much haiku in spirit. funny, I didn't get "A" or "V" in letters of geese, but then pictured the rest of the poem about their dropped feathers. hmm.
Re: end of the engagement by Mona Lisa	13-Dec-05/5:01 PM
feels like it's reaching further than it's grasped.
regarding some deleted poem...	13-Dec-05/5:02 PM
I like the first two lines. And the blank spot. :) If it wasn't really intentioned (hard to say), and the last few lines were more self-referential, I might like it more.
Re: I Remember Thinking by BrandonW	13-Dec-05/5:04 PM
How in the hell did I get here? What in the hell am I doing? I knew I shouldn't have gone to see you! How could I do this? -- I don't like those lines. I'm thinking up to that point, the piece might be okay if it were a bit more breathless. You pretty much completely lost me after that.
Re: I saw Your Face Last Night by Dovina	13-Dec-05/5:07 PM
up to "waited for you to invade dreams" flowed well for me, though "I tasted you in mind" started the downfall for me, I suppose. The beginning really needs an ending to make it exceptional, to me, and it doesn't get there.
regarding some deleted poem...	13-Dec-05/5:09 PM
The tense issues completely keep me out of this. As for punctuation, I'm a fan of using it grammatically in a poem. Three comes closest, for me.
Re: zimp by calliope	13-Dec-05/5:13 PM
too much fun. makes me want 'Milk Cult' background.
Re: logan st. by FreeFormFixation	13-Dec-05/5:14 PM
crescendo? pimentos? cute, but doesn't make it for me.
Re: Ode to necrophilia by Bobjim	14-Dec-05/6:07 PM
last line's pretty funny.
regarding some deleted poem...	14-Dec-05/6:08 PM
very odd.
Re: Static by wilco	14-Dec-05/6:29 PM
Hmm. 4th stanza did jump out as jerky before noticing your comment, but I don't know how to be helpful. I'm really not understanding what's going on.
Re: to move foward by ay deee	14-Dec-05/6:32 PM
s1 -- fun s2 -- more fun s3 -- simple, straightforward, but fitting s4 -- too straightforward in seeming, to me, even though I'm completely not getting line 4; flow seems off, as well, somehow. s5 -- also not quite fun enough (maybe if you cut 'but alas'). Hmm.
Re: Hoi Polloi by INTRANSIT	26-Dec-05/5:45 PM
huh? :)
regarding some deleted poem...	26-Dec-05/5:46 PM
cute, but doesn't manage to climb beyond that for me.
Re: real fright of going home by veggiegurl	26-Dec-05/5:48 PM
wow.
Re: Apocalypse has come to end by Prince of Void	26-Dec-05/5:50 PM
Makes me think of Bush.
Re: Paradise by TLRufener	26-Dec-05/5:51 PM
boring.
Re: Broken Bird by Sisterwolf	26-Dec-05/5:52 PM
good pustule of a pimple.
Re: Train of Thought by Sisterwolf	26-Dec-05/6:13 PM
This has ome nice images, and a decent sentiment, but some of it is just too hackneyed. Punctuation would definitely help the reader follow what is written, but I don't know if that would really help the poem.
Re: First Unborn Sun by Been Here Before	21-Feb-06/2:28 PM
Dude. You're alive! I've been wondering what became of you. :) I'm glad you found your way back here. Now why is your email bouncing? I think you picked a beautiful subject for the form--it really pounds it in. The flow is more awkward than I think it needs to be, and yeah--the spelling issues as noted.