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real fright of going home (Free verse) by veggiegurl
going home soon scared of whats ahead looking up at the moon scary thoughts running through my head I missed my mother even more I missed my brother to live with strangers is a feeling like no other it's been 4 years now i'm eighteen I had to deal w/ all the snickers and snears I geuss it's good to go home and have somewhere 2 lean going home soon scared of whats ahead looking up at the moon I hope you liked what youv'e read :) :) :) :) :) :) :) :) :) :) :) :)

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.0
Weighted score: 4.7310586
Overall Rank: 11845
Posted: December 24, 2005 4:45 PM PST; Last modified: December 24, 2005 4:45 PM PST
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[7] Dovina @ 17.255.240.138 | 26-Dec-05/1:42 PM | Reply
The moon may well enjoy it. I think the use of 2, w/, 4, youv'e, and all the smily faces detract. As a tongue-in-cheek this is good, so I'm assuming good.
[0] nentwined @ 64.60.192.131 | 26-Dec-05/5:48 PM | Reply
wow.
[7] crazyknight @ 202.83.45.163 | 26-Dec-05/8:56 PM | Reply
its good, the future is uncertain, but would u want a certain future.
[6] zodiac @ 70.109.2.131 | 27-Dec-05/9:34 PM | Reply
50 years ago, an American student your age could have recited William Cullen Bryant's "Thanatopsis" from memory. I'm not saying we're not better off than people were 50 years ago, but do *you* know what thanatopsis means?
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