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real fright of going home (Free verse) by veggiegurl

going home soon scared of whats ahead looking up at the moon scary thoughts running through my head I missed my mother even more I missed my brother to live with strangers is a feeling like no other it's been 4 years now i'm eighteen I had to deal w/ all the snickers and snears I geuss it's good to go home and have somewhere 2 lean going home soon scared of whats ahead looking up at the moon I hope you liked what youv'e read :) :) :) :) :) :) :) :) :) :) :) :)

Dovina 26-Dec-05/1:42 PM
The moon may well enjoy it. I think the use of 2, w/, 4, youv'e, and all the smily faces detract. As a tongue-in-cheek this is good, so I'm assuming good.




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