Re: Soup Can by oneglove |
21-Sep-06/5:17 PM |
my sense of perspective and viewpoint got scrambled between verses 3 and 4; chilling finale and knockout opening... not conviced by self-rhyme of along, though...v3 seems a little clumsy
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Re: if really its me by Landon2 |
21-Sep-06/5:30 PM |
know the feeling :)! ... reads like it should be spoken over beats. If not, i'd introduce more rests and split some lines into 2 or 3 .....
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regarding some deleted poem... |
2-Oct-06/3:14 PM |
a pleasure to read...thanx :)
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Re: untitled by harryparatestes |
2-Oct-06/3:28 PM |
not that i'm into angels but it would have worked better for me with " angels on every breeze..." ... also "opportunities" .... nit-picking i know but that's what we're here for... nice poem :)
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Re: "Twee" by Ranger |
2-Oct-06/3:35 PM |
multilayered bit of fun...is it deep....is it ironic ...surely not cynical... a comment on the human condition or aspiration...i give up... enjoyed reading it though :)
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Re: Wyndham by Aetius |
2-Oct-06/3:54 PM |
works well as a childs poem and i quite liked it; but if you're not here for comments or votes may i enquire why you are here?
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Re: The Mandarin by Caducus |
11-Oct-06/1:47 PM |
when i'm loving, yet never when i fuck ... yeah, that's nice , the 2 fucks work i think, but how about when you fuck while you're loving ... freud would probably have a ball here...what with dad and all .. :)
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Re: snot by fattony |
11-Oct-06/1:55 PM |
started out as yet another edna yet the final line shows a true poetic sensibility ... what else ya got, dude ?
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Re: connect the dots by daniella |
21-Oct-06/6:43 AM |
I looked at the site and watched the whole film and would recommend any others to do the same; i think this counts as a bit more than a political statement; 10 for the lead 6 for the poem
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Re: Work by half.italian |
21-Oct-06/6:48 AM |
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Re: weather poem part 1: the wolf journal by nypoet22 |
21-Oct-06/7:02 AM |
well; got blown away by this; took it slow and let it speak to me , then saw all this sour-face bitchin and wondered what that was all about. in some of us poetry is a continuum and it being broken up in chunks merely a convention ( sez he pompously)... anyhow, 8 for now and will return to it later
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Re: Instruction by Dovina |
26-Nov-06/5:49 PM |
"were future world so kind" perhaps? :).....aaahh i see, a sense-timing paradox thing ... nice
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30-Jan-07/7:13 AM |
struck a chord. didn-t see it as anti-bush, rather as anti the other lot ... guess there's not much difference
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1-Feb-07/6:15 AM |
indeed pushes the envelope of poetry's definition; reminds me of a chelsea art school reading of a knitting pattern back in the 60s. please accept a point
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Re: LOVES ME NOT~NOBM by Radiation |
1-Feb-07/6:19 AM |
take no notice, you can only get better; this is far superior to your earlier effort
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Re: Snow by MacFrantic |
7-May-07/3:48 PM |
poweful opening swooned into greeting-card land
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7-May-07/3:50 PM |
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Re: Altitude by half.italian |
7-May-07/3:56 PM |
an unwinding coil, eh? ... wassat? helium whispers is nice
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regarding some deleted poem... |
7-May-07/3:59 PM |
empathically inclined to vote eight, but just can't
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7-May-07/4:00 PM |
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