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Instruction

Member since 2004 · Posted 25 Nov 2006 · 13 comments

“How is it in the world with you,” he asked in small-talk jest. “Hope it’s kind and not instructive.” I laughed and told him truly, “If the world were kind, would I be here?” adjusting words to fit what was?” “Would I rather sail to Barcelona, or ride a bike along the coast, a day or two to south Laguna, “or live again the day that dawned solution for a counour, pulled by raucous points, “or be hiking like John Muir, cold along Sierra’s crest, noticing a house fly at thirteen thousand feet, “or digging ‘taters in the dirt from where I planted eyes last spring, then weeded, watered, waited? “Of course I’d rather do those things when future world was kind and offered few adversities, had little to instruct.”

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[9] Ranger 25-Nov-06/2:02 PM Reply
'I'd rather do those things/when future world was kind' - tense consistency? Other than that, this is grand. You should live the Ray Mears life.
[n/a] Dovina › Ranger 25-Nov-06/7:40 PM Reply
It's a paradox of tense and timing. Thanks for coming back. The place looks like a cleared-out warehouse, feeling like the city dump, where poems are brought for final burial. Surely you've got one to dump.
[9] Ranger › Dovina 26-Nov-06/1:50 AM Reply
I don't have anything particularly recent to post except for half an essay on Derrida. Poetry websites seem to have sucked the life out of me. I am still around though, whenever there's anything worth commenting on.
[9] Ranger › Ranger 26-Nov-06/5:00 AM Reply
Update - make that a whole essay on Derrida.

I'm such a nerd.
[n/a] Dovina › Ranger 26-Nov-06/6:22 AM Reply
It would truly be a nerdy thing to post an essy here, on Derrida, or as Horus8, on life in general. But the place is so vacant, why not?
[9] deleted user 26-Nov-06/4:17 AM Reply
Well done Dovina--holds its own with some of your best. It's nice to read some decent stuff for a change.
[n/a] Dovina › deleted user 26-Nov-06/6:23 AM Reply
Oh gosh, it's just a conversation. Really, quit. :)
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. › Dovina 26-Nov-06/5:16 PM Reply
This isn't ConversationRanker. Get rid of it.
[n/a] Dovina › -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 26-Nov-06/5:33 PM Reply
Oh, right. It’s Essay-on-Foreign-Travel,-Replete-with-Chiches Ranker.
[7] pete 26-Nov-06/5:49 PM Reply
"were future world so kind" perhaps? :).....aaahh i see, a sense-timing paradox thing ... nice
[n/a] Dovina › pete 26-Nov-06/6:05 PM Reply
I know the grammar of that line is awful. Hoping the thought isn’t. Thanks.
[8] amanda_dcosta 3-Dec-06/1:48 AM Reply
I kinda wonder how you come up with the contents you write. Pretty good , I must say.
[7] Stephen Robins 8-Dec-06/8:48 AM Reply
Wooly and ultimately a bit of a failure. Shame it semmed infused with the portents of excellence, only to leave one slightly stained.