Re: a comment on A Losing Streak by Jigg	7-Mar-03/6:39 AM
perhaps you are right. good day to you, sirrah.
Re: Sofia by daniella	6-Mar-03/8:31 PM
wisdom, child. wisdom.
Re: a comment on A Losing Streak by Jigg	6-Mar-03/8:17 PM
i thought you had laughed your groin off years ago, and that was responsible for the TONE of most of your comments? ah, me. another mistake.
Re: a comment on Aries, the God of war by Shardik	6-Mar-03/3:26 PM
yes.
Re: a comment on Home by morffrom	6-Mar-03/2:06 PM
green works on many levels: reflecting the landscape, a metaphor for their youth (coloring everything around them), alive and vibrant, growing. there are more. these pop up in my mind immediately. trust your gut, mysterious palindrome.
Re: Aries, the God of war by Shardik	6-Mar-03/1:57 PM
better. too many throw-away words for a haiku, though: ram horns crash, ____ ____ whet stones sharply grind ____ ____ Mars in retrograde. get on it son!!!
Re: Aries, the God of war by Shardik	6-Mar-03/12:19 PM
ewe. y the comma?
Re: A Losing Streak by Jigg	6-Mar-03/12:04 PM
what happens if you duct tape buttered toast, butter side up, of course, to a cat, and drop it off the top of a building? do you create an anti-gravity field? didn't someone try this once? the cat HAS to land on its feet. the toast HAS to land butter-side down. maybe -=Dark_Angel=- can step in, and offer a ray of light, here? or at least some sort of conditional statement?
Re: One More Mile by marvelis	6-Mar-03/12:02 PM
stop rhyming NOW. go to vegas. loosen up.
Re: Text Messages Sent by blueENDyellow	6-Mar-03/12:00 PM
how does this have anything to do with text messages?
Re: a comment on Sweet, Sweet... Daddy by Jeremi B. Handrinos	6-Mar-03/8:26 AM
that is fucking CLASSIC!
Re: Prometheus sang for vultures by horus8	5-Mar-03/12:29 PM
yes: dodos. hawks. pigeons. no: peacocks. chickens. dinosaurs.
Re: Something for Lynn by Jeremi B. Handrinos	5-Mar-03/10:44 AM
shit. bleed tears all over me, and not a kleenex in situ. still negative? good. have a 9.
Re: The Tragic Life of a Stinky Cheese Man by bunniesnangels	4-Mar-03/1:52 PM
i'll take danish bleu over cookies any day.
Re: a comment on The wheelchair by INTRANSIT	4-Mar-03/1:50 PM
did you turn it upside down and shake it thouroughly? WHY THE HELL NOT? give a little more here. why did you visit? why did you not find the owner? why did you care?
Re: Amputee by INTRANSIT	4-Mar-03/1:48 PM
p.s.--this is one of your best.
Re: Amputee by INTRANSIT	4-Mar-03/1:47 PM
keen-edged hurt, here. did you know that these regrow? they will look and feel different--maybe a different color or shape--they will have different sensitivities. but they will serve you well, as you will them. it's not over. step into the current. get washed away in the whitewater. it's the only way to fly.
Re: The Eskimo and the fish by INTRANSIT	4-Mar-03/1:43 PM
hey, intransit. some questions for you: do inuits chant when fishing? does this scare the fish? because of these nagging thoughts, i have issues with the way you have changed the poem. you have taken something pritine and clear, and thrown sediment into it. the chant is too sentimental, i think. if spiritualistic contemplation is your aim, change "auger" back to "augur", and go from there. your second chant changes him from automaton to thinker, which is not a bad shift, but, i think, shows too much intrusion of mind for a piece that focus on rote. it's a start of a shift, but not an entire shift. okay, the thoughts came out full formed. trim them.
Re: a comment on The Drunkest ever by horus8	4-Mar-03/1:24 PM
okay then. february made me shiver...i made it through, though. march's a buster too. fuck. i need break out of a big ass rut, h. i need a fucking shove. or maybe a shovel.
Re: The Drunkest ever by horus8	4-Mar-03/12:52 PM
must you end it without a match? or is the pass-out implied here? more, more, more. (S1--roll, not 'role'?)