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Amputee (Free verse) by INTRANSIT
My two best friends met some ladies. I was happy for them. A few years later I noticed my index and second finger were missing. A warehouse co-worker and I had gotten close during our work history. Then his mother died and left him an inheritance. Suddenly, my thumb was gone. I got to know a gal, smart, funny, a loving people person. She shot herself. I have found myself staying at home more. I keep my hands in my pockets. That way you can't tell which one is missing. But then, Who really gives a rats' ass.

Up the ladder: The Stifling Moment
Down the ladder: Love Greased

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Arithmetic Mean: 7.6
Weighted score: 6.3
Overall Rank: 873
Posted: February 13, 2003 5:32 PM PST; Last modified: September 28, 2004 6:03 PM PDT
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[9] <{Baba^Yaga}> @ 24.126.113.154 | 13-Feb-03/5:51 PM | Reply
Nice one. Have you seen stephen king's "cat's eye".e
[10] razorgrin @ 142.166.250.207 | 13-Feb-03/8:58 PM | Reply
very cool. thoroughly cool.
[10] god'swife @ 209.179.211.190 | 13-Feb-03/11:00 PM | Reply
Bada beam Bada boom.
[8] AuntyM @ 205.188.208.106 | 17-Feb-03/9:22 PM | Reply
you can really feel your pain in this one.
[8] <~> @ 167.206.181.179 | 4-Mar-03/1:47 PM | Reply
keen-edged hurt, here.

did you know that these regrow? they will look and feel different--maybe a different color or shape--they will have different sensitivities. but they will serve you well, as you will them. it's not over. step into the current. get washed away in the whitewater. it's the only way to fly.
[n/a] INTRANSIT @ 152.163.188.7 > <~> | 4-Mar-03/3:01 PM | Reply
Whitewater sounds like fun. I can't remember the last time I had whitewater fun. God I miss that feeling.
[8] <~> @ 167.206.181.179 | 4-Mar-03/1:48 PM | Reply
p.s.--this is one of your best.
[10] Dan garcia-Black @ 67.122.15.131 | 28-Sep-04/7:13 PM | Reply
I count my friend on the middle finger of my hand that is left.-10-
[10] Dan garcia-Black @ 67.122.15.131 > Dan garcia-Black | 28-Sep-04/7:14 PM | Reply
Sorry. That comment was so obviously lame. Good poem 10+.
[10] Jeremi B. Handrinos @ 24.130.62.63 | 29-Sep-04/1:55 PM | Reply
I do.
[10] Caducus @ 81.130.183.10 | 30-Sep-04/6:46 AM | Reply
you crack me up. i would give you my left and right arms if i could've wrote this.
[n/a] darylchew @ 202.156.2.130 | 30-Sep-04/7:09 AM | Reply
..whaa.
[10] arduinn @ 165.21.83.247 | 5-Oct-04/6:33 AM | Reply
Honestly, when I first skim through this.. I couldn't quite decipher what you are trying to say... but after reading it a couple of times.. it makes sense. bloody good.
[0] Edna Sweetlove @ 85.210.60.128 | 20-Jun-06/4:04 PM | Reply
Wonderful.
[8] bwaha @ 216.162.88.130 | 17-Apr-07/7:16 AM | Reply
Love the simplicity in this.

The imagery is powerful though. A lot of attempts to end a piece in sardonic wit are trite or overdone but this entire thing flows from start to finish without a hitch.

I like it alot.
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