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Free verse № 40250

Amputee

by INTRANSIT

Member since 2002 · Posted 13 Feb 2003 · Edited 28 Sep 2004 · 15 comments

My two best friends met some ladies. I was happy for them. A few years later I noticed my index and second finger were missing. A warehouse co-worker and I had gotten close during our work history. Then his mother died and left him an inheritance. Suddenly, my thumb was gone. I got to know a gal, smart, funny, a loving people person. She shot herself. I have found myself staying at home more. I keep my hands in my pockets. That way you can't tell which one is missing. But then, Who really gives a rats' ass.

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15 comments

[9] <{Baba^Yaga}> 13-Feb-03/5:51 PM Reply
Nice one. Have you seen stephen king's "cat's eye".e
[10] razorgrin 13-Feb-03/8:58 PM Reply
very cool. thoroughly cool.
[10] god'swife 13-Feb-03/11:00 PM Reply
Bada beam Bada boom.
[8] AuntyM 17-Feb-03/9:22 PM Reply
you can really feel your pain in this one.
[8] <~> 4-Mar-03/1:47 PM Reply
keen-edged hurt, here.

did you know that these regrow? they will look and feel different--maybe a different color or shape--they will have different sensitivities. but they will serve you well, as you will them. it's not over. step into the current. get washed away in the whitewater. it's the only way to fly.
[n/a] INTRANSIT › <~> 4-Mar-03/3:01 PM Reply
Whitewater sounds like fun. I can't remember the last time I had whitewater fun. God I miss that feeling.
[8] <~> 4-Mar-03/1:48 PM Reply
p.s.--this is one of your best.
[10] Dan garcia-Black 28-Sep-04/7:13 PM Reply
I count my friend on the middle finger of my hand that is left.-10-
[10] Dan garcia-Black › Dan garcia-Black 28-Sep-04/7:14 PM Reply
Sorry. That comment was so obviously lame. Good poem 10+.
[10] Jeremi B. Handrinos 29-Sep-04/1:55 PM Reply
I do.
[10] Caducus 30-Sep-04/6:46 AM Reply
you crack me up. i would give you my left and right arms if i could've wrote this.
[n/a] darylchew 30-Sep-04/7:09 AM Reply
..whaa.
[10] arduinn 5-Oct-04/6:33 AM Reply
Honestly, when I first skim through this.. I couldn't quite decipher what you are trying to say... but after reading it a couple of times.. it makes sense. bloody good.
[0] Edna Sweetlove 20-Jun-06/4:04 PM Reply
Wonderful.
[8] bwaha 17-Apr-07/7:16 AM Reply
Love the simplicity in this.

The imagery is powerful though. A lot of attempts to end a piece in sardonic wit are trite or overdone but this entire thing flows from start to finish without a hitch.

I like it alot.