| Re: Memoirs of a Monk - St. Screamer by SupremeDreamer |
15-Jul-03/9:07 PM |
profane...
did you want 'chords', to give it more blood?
maybe "laid" instead of "lain"
good work, here, but not user-friendly. then again, does it need to be?
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| Re: a comment on Acoustic by zzinnia66 |
15-Jul-03/8:51 PM |
like, "whined", not like, breathe, or blow..
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| Re: a comment on joyriding by Bill Z Bub |
15-Jul-03/8:49 PM |
tintagiles. he's lyrical, like that.
i dunno, it just made me think of him.
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| Re: a comment on Igor's inspiration by zzinnia66 |
15-Jul-03/8:47 PM |
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| Re: rainday by Bill Z Bub |
15-Jul-03/8:41 PM |
i want more bounce in this nonsensey-like rhymer!
(oh, i am such a whiner!)
good star, but take it all the way, BZB.
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| Re: S c r e a m by Kitch |
15-Jul-03/8:40 PM |
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i know exactly what you need. take it waaay back, and treat yourself to a little "pretty hate machine" , extra loud! you'll thank me in the morning!!1
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| Re: walking by Rodavlas |
14-Jul-03/9:54 PM |
no. last stanza--no way in hell.
the EVERYTHING is off, and that is not unique; it's just not right.
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| Re: On A Night Like This by bazz |
14-Jul-03/9:48 PM |
this is the ttle of a bob dylan song.
what do youwant from us, when you give less than we expect? the naming is everything.
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| Re: a comment on thought & memory by Bill Z Bub |
14-Jul-03/9:41 PM |
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nut sack, hind foot--it's all pink and fated, to me.
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| Re: thought & memory by Bill Z Bub |
14-Jul-03/9:40 PM |
BILL!! do not tickle these deities!! the are violent, and virulent.
drop the great; embrace the mundane. you will love me for it.
x, z
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| Re: a comment on The Ebony Orchid of Theta by Shardik |
10-Jul-03/8:50 AM |
theta brain waves--dream state.
nice poem, h. it calls out for a continuation.
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| Re: Butterfield, Minn. Tommy's farm 1993 by Bachus |
9-Jul-03/10:29 PM |
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| Re: a poet in the city by Bill Z Bub |
9-Jul-03/10:18 PM |
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all gone. new clothes. new shoes. Leo, do you still need me?
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| Re: The Drunkest ever by horus8 |
9-Jul-03/10:03 PM |
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is everyone OFF for the summer???
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| Re: a comment on The Drunkest ever by horus8 |
9-Jul-03/9:46 PM |
should he charm a bipolar? cause i got that going with OCD, and paranoid, per official documents.
maggie, i wish i'd never
seen your faaaa-ace...
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| Re: Not quite myselfs. by cleverdevice |
8-Jul-03/6:39 AM |
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| Re: Fireworks & Family Reunions (Randel's cry for love) by Shardik |
5-Jul-03/7:20 PM |
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| Re: a comment on 195.157.153.253 by <~> |
5-Jul-03/7:12 PM |
no. home now. and glad to be. consider the place boinked, enough maybe for both of us.
and you?
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| Re: a comment on the photobooth by Bill Z Bub |
5-Jul-03/7:00 PM |
and it lathes you, cc.
lathers and laves and lathes you, alustre!
xo,
z
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| Re: a comment on the photobooth by Bill Z Bub |
5-Jul-03/6:49 PM |
don't be shy!!tell them that NFG bought it!! go on! slather the name around!!!
(yeah!!!)
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