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Memoirs of a Monk - St. Screamer (Free verse) by SupremeDreamer Slam dunk of the drunken monk,
lines written red,
wine of purple grape,
mouth agape in
occult worship and
uttering the wise words
of loud nothings.
Piteous Punk of the broken tablet
non compos mentis eye fixed
upon the decayed ghosts
of once golden words
hung on methodical chords
new age harlot arias
radiating profane lies...
Timeworn trunk of the Word
riddle storm
intwined secrets
laid within,
yet only drunken priests,
glare in theistic lore-
the spawned son of a whore
her mirror reflecting this:
Jesus coughs
-heaving blood:
The life force of
a lamb.
--5, July, year of our lord 2003
-Saint Screamer.
-Apostate Dreamer.
Up the ladder:
Where I Stand
Down the ladder:
How I got my Jacket back
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Arithmetic Mean: 8.2
Posted: July 15, 2003 1:03 AM PDT; Last modified: July 15, 2003 9:22 PM PDTWeighted score: 6.6 Overall Rank: 601 Comments:
I like how the layout looks like a lightningbolt\excamation point. Must...re-..read...
profane...
did you want 'chords', to give it more blood? maybe "laid" instead of "lain" good work, here, but not user-friendly. then again, does it need to be?
thanks for pointing those out, ill get em fixed. user friendly isnt something i can be called, im the thorn of the black rose my fellow poet.. the thorn to prick the mind.. ;)
Very good, I'm proud of you, you've done it.
:D I made me pencil into a lightsaber??? heh. thanks. ;)
i am amazed
Very good. You are making huge strides forward. Keep up the good work. 10
Whammo. Golden Calf Award!
Golden Calf Award? Whats that?
This is so damn funky! Absolute demon opener, and 'decayed ghosts' is very nice too.
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overall good
Bringing jesus in in the third verse seems to turn this poem upside down. I guess maybe more religeous image allusions like in the first two (the wine/broken tablet)
how about (insert) saint
a-postate