Re: Pledge by http://mulberryfairy	10-Jan-06/9:19 AM
you made me laugh with this one. and you made me ask myself who i am, damn you.
Re: The Dark Days of Aristotle by somemorepoetry	10-Jan-06/9:27 AM
please, explain what this means: Where there’s smoke, there’s fire, he said Together with his long name and Cigarette brand. i don't understand why he would say his name and cigarette brand. or am i getting it all wrong?
Re: Untitled by http://mulberryfairy	10-Jan-06/9:30 AM
i like the dream litany. i don't understand how the nightmare protects you, though.
Re: Flow by zodiac	11-Jan-06/11:13 AM
i liked it then and i likes it now.
Re: The Hermit on the Thoroughfare by http://mulberryfairy	11-Jan-06/11:15 AM
"mortal pelvis" is an odd combo; how can a pelvis be anything but?
regarding some deleted poem...	12-Jan-06/12:38 PM
"cirrus threads of mouth travelled lobes "my love they cannot hear us"." is beautiful, Cad. i think this would be more immediate, more urgent, if you wrote it in the present tense: "our lips mould as one,..."
regarding some deleted poem...	16-Jan-06/9:07 AM
this is lovely. i like the way you reversed the language in S2.
Re: Green things by ecargo	16-Jan-06/9:35 AM
"none to straddle worlds or shoulder skies." is a great line. "We break us like ice;" is unclear; what do you mean by this?
Re: After Fighting (More Blood Edit) by zodiac	27-Jan-06/12:14 AM
hmmm. it had a lot more power as a prose poem, zodiac. not that it's not good like this...just that there was an urgency in the paragraph that's missing here.
regarding some deleted poem...	3-Apr-06/11:32 AM
nicely done, intransit. neither the endorphins nor the miso threw me, although i think you might want to de-capitalize it, just because it's been mistaken for a brand name.
Re: Wyndham by Aetius	29-Sep-06/1:21 PM
LOl. quite a bit of fun, here, ae
Re: the secret life of the sundew by pollywolly	29-Sep-06/1:26 PM
don't you mean nectar?
Re: Colors of Me by MissUnderstood	29-Sep-06/1:27 PM
do you know about enjambement? it's a useful poetic device. this is an excellent start, but if you didn't end each line so suddenly, i think you could make this baby work overtime.
Re: a fresh start by *.*ReAdY To SnAp.*.	29-Sep-06/1:35 PM
the perfect pimple! 10, i say! 10!
Re: a fresh start by *.*ReAdY To SnAp.*.	29-Sep-06/1:35 PM
except, lose the last line.
Re: Wet dreams by ecargo	29-Sep-06/1:37 PM
gorgeous language, e. 'mother bulk' sat well with me. it was the perfect image, for me, to describe the scene.
Re: In the hollow (rough) by ecargo	29-Sep-06/1:39 PM
"flashing quick and crosshatched with careless pricker scrapes;" oooh. ooh. ooh.
Re: Farmhouse, Southern France (storm on arrival) by Ranger	29-Sep-06/1:41 PM
i think you go too far, here, ranger. i know you mean 'sunflower" but solar flower reads as solar flare, to me, at first--not that it will read like that to everyone, but 'flare' is a word often quick on the heels of 'solar'. you've got some nice descriptions here, but the language gets blustery, rather than omminous, whioch is, i think the mood you want to set for this. although, i could be wrong.
regarding some deleted poem...	25-Oct-06/12:06 PM
this is a hoot, DGB. i don't think you need the word "ever" in the last line. that takes it a little too far over the top. great imagery.
Re: for sue (20030815) by nentwined	9-Jul-08/7:47 AM
ha! thanks for the smile, k :)