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a fresh start (Pimple) by *.*ReAdY To SnAp.*. its amazing
something so simple
how it changes things
the most valuable things
a faint familiar feeling
that certain one
youâve had it before
but different
iâve said it before
love
a four letter word
with a whole new meaning
not yet
just the beginning
a miracle in the making?
disaster in the waiting..
positive thinking
great feelings flowing
crazy thoughts exploding
a fresh new start
hope, faith, confidence
Up the ladder:
Writer's Block
Down the ladder:
Andrew
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Posted: September 23, 2006 9:05 AM PDT; Last modified: September 23, 2006 9:05 AM PDTWeighted score: 4.880797 Overall Rank: 10075 Comments:
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nypoet22 @ 65.10.92.48
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23-Sep-06/9:26 AM
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instead of just telling people about the feelings, it might be helpful to try to show through concrete images how those feelings manifest themselves. right now the words are so completely vague i can't find anything to latch onto.
Even if it has all been said many times, the impact of it must be like that great change of address we've read so much about, but none of us can describe from experience.
boring and illiterate
the perfect pimple! 10, i say! 10!
except, lose the last line.
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