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Rainbow (Free verse) by TwilightDawned
Rainbows of forbidden desire, flicker without the light, dimming in to the darkness, the kites of my heart take flight. Though the darkned colours, Washed away my sorrow, I Feel for nothing, I am a faded rainbow, drained of emotion filled colours.

Up the ladder: Fire, Water, and Blood
Down the ladder: Sawdust

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.0
Weighted score: 4.880797
Overall Rank: 10075
Posted: July 5, 2004 2:17 PM PDT; Last modified: July 5, 2004 2:17 PM PDT
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Comments:
[8] Dovina @ 24.52.157.176 | 5-Jul-04/2:38 PM | Reply
Rainbows don't flicker. Other images are inaccurate of language. It's a common theme and hard to do well.
[n/a] zodiac @ 24.93.86.20 > Dovina | 5-Jul-04/2:53 PM | Reply
What does "inaccurate of language" mean?
[8] Dovina @ 24.52.157.176 > zodiac | 5-Jul-04/2:58 PM | Reply
Kites washing away sorrow.
dimming in to the darkness
[n/a] zodiac @ 24.93.86.20 > Dovina | 5-Jul-04/6:08 PM | Reply
That is not an appropriate answer.
[8] Dovina @ 24.52.157.176 > zodiac | 5-Jul-04/6:13 PM | Reply
Thank you.
[7] Quarton @ 12.217.221.61 | 5-Jul-04/2:43 PM | Reply
Short and sweet. Nice imagery.
[0] god'swife @ 4.231.163.56 | 6-Jul-04/7:36 PM | Reply
This is the worst poem I've seen this evening. Try saying something normally.
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