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monday v2 (Free verse) by ay deee
today is the day had a good rest last night i dreamt i was drafted i was unprepared no tools my sister got out of the truck crying i hugged her she walked around a cluttered house with me amalgam of steps and closets i thought i saw my aunt's spare bedroom a feeling of the place on pine she suggested necessities i struggled to find camo pants, plaid shirt my backpack sagging with a few worthless things ready to accept my lot the enemy was already moving on pine street they knew gunshots fear i woke early made french toast and coffee today is the day a new seat on my bicycle backpack with sketchbook and lunch i am prepared

Up the ladder: a skinny man on the dock
Down the ladder: Apocalypse has come to end

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.0
Weighted score: 4.880797
Overall Rank: 10066
Posted: October 14, 2005 7:03 AM PDT; Last modified: October 14, 2005 7:03 AM PDT
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Comments:
[n/a] ALChemy @ 24.74.101.159 | 14-Oct-05/1:05 PM | Reply
Are you man or woman? Because I've never heard of women being drafted but on the other hand you wear a skirt. Maybe your just Scottish.
[n/a] ay deee @ 204.90.50.252 > ALChemy | 17-Oct-05/8:27 AM | Reply
i wear a skirt?
[n/a] Dovina @ 17.255.240.138 > ay deee | 17-Oct-05/6:57 PM | Reply
So do I. It's what separates us and gives us that unique, adorable character men cn't resist.
[n/a] ay deee @ 204.90.50.252 > Dovina | 18-Oct-05/6:20 AM | Reply
hold on.
what?
what about the words in this poem put a skirt on?
[n/a] ALChemy @ 24.74.101.159 > Dovina | 25-Oct-05/7:59 AM | Reply
Yes indeed! Easy access.
[8] zodiac @ 213.186.183.100 | 15-Oct-05/5:53 AM | Reply
Can't trust that day.

On a related note, I just watched that movie Elephant last night. Now that's some fucked up shit.
[2] Tintagiles @ 198.164.201.17 | 16-Oct-05/10:42 PM | Reply
Yawn yawn yawn.
[n/a] ay deee @ 204.90.50.252 > Tintagiles | 17-Oct-05/8:27 AM | Reply
are you sleepy?
can you be specific?
was the first version better?
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